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happening by accident or chance, rather than design
Hi, I'm here to review for the Magical Menegerie 2019 (Gotta Catch them all, y'know. According to Deana that is!)
I love that you picked this one for a podfic. As a Snapione shipper myself, I'm always happy to read a well written one that keeps them both in character. They're both strong will characters to begin with, smart as well as intelligent.
It's just their age difference that can be a bit squiggy, but this Hermione seems old enough to pass by that squiggy (grey) area. I love that she was willing to go to him, even if she wasn't sure he would be happy to see her. Since this is the prologue, I'm not sure what is going on and why she would have questions. But it written beautifully enough that it's sucking me into continuing on.
That is the mark of true writer, and you have it, dear Meg.
I never knew that Hermione was a Peeping Tom (or Thomasina, in this cause) but it shows us the depth of her feeling for him, her Severus.
All in all, I love the beginning of this story in how well you set the descriptions. I look forward to the rest.
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"I had to do it. At least once."
Hey, Meg, here for EvS review battle in the common room!
I'm a sucker for Draco and Hermione fics. I've always thought she could do better than Ron Weasley. (Nothing wrong with Ron, they're just not the right 'fit' to me. Neither is Harry and Ginny, but that's an entirely different story, there. I know people who are just blessed canon shippers, and refuse to see a different track - so glad to see you on the other side.)
Anyhow, I loved this! I could sit and type that over and over, but, that's just fangirling, right? I loved how you stuck to both their canon selves, but still worked in that KISS. Yup, it was perfect.
Just as her ending reaction was, the slap. Yup, I agree with Malfoy, it was definitely worth it. Even if they had to step back to their normal relationship - I could see an understanding between them.
Gives me a little hope for the insufferable git.
I'm glad I picked this fic to review, it was awesome. For a first Dramione, it deserves a high five.
A family Christmas lunch at the Noble and Most Ancient House of Black.
Just as fabulous as the first (or, actually the second, as this one was the first.)
Baby Tonks made me smile with Narcissa and Andromeda just being regular sisters in that moment. I enjoyed their closeness. There was always something to me about Narcissa and how she wasn't as bigoted as the other Blacks towards Muggleborns. (I've even written her that way, so it was heartening to see it in your story, too.)
Thanks for the great read!
Aww, thank you so much! I'm so happy you decided to check out this one as well! :)
Baby Tonks is just adorable, isn't she? And yes, I agree that Narcissa wasn't as bigoted as the rest of the family... or at least, I've always thought that she valued family bonds more than she valued Pureblood ideology and that she would still feel affection for her sister, despite her marrying someone "unworthy".
Glad you enjoyed this too! Thank you for another lovely review!
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Hermione whispered softly, 'Confundus.'
Hey, Meg, back again for the EvS review battle!
<i>Confundus</i>. I really, for some reason, before I began reading, expected this to be directed at Ron. Why? He's an insufferabe git, of course.
But, then, I saw the name <i>Cormac</i> and almost, well, lost my lunch. If there was ever a person in the HP universe I disliked more than good ole Umbridge, it would be Cormac. You described perfectly how slimy he and just how he makes <i>me</i> feel in Hermione's own reaction.
I love how you've written her. She (and our beloved Snape) are my favorite characters and you've kept her <i>in</i> character so beautifully. You have a great way of drawing your readers in with your words, dear.
This was fantastic, and even made me feel for Ron.
“When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace” – Jimi Hendrix
Peter struggles with a life-changing decision.
[2014 Keckers Runner-up for Best Villain]
Hey, here for review tag!
I chose this story because it was about Peter. (Not because I'm hooked on Peter, but because I've written two one shots with him in it for fic exchanges with friends.)
Peter is always the forgotten Marauder. Kind of the last to picked to a team. His courage pretty much came from his friends and having them around him. You've shown us a side of him without his friends to protect him, and it's pretty ugly. ALL of his other friends would have died for him. He even knows that, but still... he just excuses away why he's doing it.
I've never been much of a fan of James Potter because of the way he bullied Snape in school. That Lily picked him over her longer friendship with Snape has always bothered me. Things could have/ would have been far different if she had. (That's not part of your story, I know! It just led up to what happeed here!)
I think you've captured Peter well, here. Always the follower. Picking the wrong person to follow. If only he had told someone in the Order what was going on! But truly, if faced with Voldemort like he'd been, how many of us would have pee'd our pants and done the same?
But there are so many 'What ifs' that could have changed the outcomes of everyone, that Harry Potter and the series wouldn't have existed!
Thank you for your story, it was GREAT.
Right on! Peter is a really interesting character, and I wrote this story because I didn't like him, haha. And because, as you said, he IS the 'forgotten' Marauder and his story doesn't really get told, especially not at the time I wrote this. These days there seem to be a lot more Peter fics which is awesome. I mean, as a character he's fascinating, and things COULD have been so different if he'd chosen differently, but this decision alone is like the most awful thing anyone could possibly do to their friends.
I do think you're right in that Peter's courage was from his friends. I think he wanted to be as brave and selfless as they were, and admired that about them, but when it came down to it he just couldn't be. And I almost feel a little bad for him about that.
I'm sure Snape also saw it as terribly unfair that Lily picked James over him, with their longstanding friendship probably making him even more bitter about it. But James changed in a positive way, whereas Snape didn't. And yeah I know this is off topic, but worthy of discussion! Now I'm wondering if there's a James Potter discussion thread on the forums. But anyway. /tangent
Thank you, I'm happy to hear that the story captures Peter well. And I think your point about how what Peter did compares to what any normal person would do in the situation is really important. Everyone else in the Order is commended for their bravery, and like, all the 'good guys' are that selfless, but the reality is that not everyone is like that, and I think Peter's hesitance and fear of dying is far more realistic for the average person. Not that that makes his ultimate decision right. But at least I think he is more understandable.
The what-ifs are one of my favorite thigns about fanfiction. It really could have been so different!
Thanks so much for you r review, and I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! <3
Barty Crouch Jr: fearsome Death Eater, Auror impersonator, and aspiring chef.
The story of why it took Barty an entire book to get around to killing Harry Potter.
Happy birthday!! I'm here to offer you a present in the way of a review!
This story was hilarious. I loved the bit about the cooking shows. (Why I picked it, because I've been binge watching Gordon Ramsey for the past few months. LOL) It was charmingly AU, as well as a good excuse as to why he never got around to doing his part of the task and getting rewarded by the Dark Lord himself! Possibly, and it's a huge 'if' of a possibility, Voldemort could awarded him with his own show if he'd actually completed his job.
I'll be honest, through out the whole movie/book, I never realized that there was anything wrong with Moody. I did find him sort of scary when he first appeared in the Great Hall, but for all of overshadowing JKR threw in, I never got it.
Again, the happiest of birthdays, and keep writing your lovely stories!
Omg! Thank you so much! This was such a wonderful surprise.
Ha, this is one of the weirdest things I've ever written XD I'm so happy that you enjoyed it! And found that it sorta made sense to explain why he took so long. Like... It COULD have happened this way. Guess we'll never know. :p And now I'm wishing he had been successful because I would love to see voldemort hand out cooking shows as rewards ahaha. Thanks so much for your review!
Sirius teaches Regulus something about prejudice
Wow, what can I say? This was adorable, light-hearted and again showed family dynamics that you didn't get to see in the books written by JKR. I know it would have been rediculously hard for her to flesh out of her characters, but poor Regulus was basically just a set of initials and a little brother label in the books. It would have helped flesh out poor Sirius also.
Sirius is right, y'know? Not all werewolves are bad. But just like anyone else, there's good, bad and 'grey' people/creatures. Everyone should be judged on their own merits - whether they be werewolf, muggleborn, haflblood, vampire or pureblood. The fight between Sirius and his father show just how bad pre-judging people can be. Leads to prejudice and bigotry. (What's going on right now in the world is evidence, too, of just that.)
Once it's learned and it takes hold, it's hard to wash away. Hard to change the views of someone who doesn't want to be changed, so I'm glad to see that little seed planted by Sirius. It's possibly what helped spur Regulus on later to rebel from the Black family values and Voldemort.
Thank you for reviewing this, too! :)
I think I told you already, but I really love the sibling relationship between Sirius and Regulus. Yes, I agree that Regulus didn't have much development in the books, but JK did give us just enough to imagine what kind of person he might be, and he's such a tragic and fascinating character.
Yes, exactly, there's good and bad among werewolves just like there's good and bad among "normal" people. Just like there's good and bad among all kind of creatures... which is what the whole Harry Potter saga is about, after all, isn't it? And yes, unfortunately the world seem to go in the exact opposite direction at the moment... :( How is politics so bad everywhere? But let's not get into it...
Yes, prejudice is hard to overcome... and yes, I do like to think that Sirius' story helped Regulus build a bit of critical sense and maybe make him doubt, and eventually rebel, later.
Thank you so much for another lovely review!
For Wolfgirl's "Dark Turn" Challenge.
Prompt: Minerva McGonagall bakes biscuits for her new colleague, Remus Lupin.
Oh, dear Chiara! I love this story. It's got all the angst wrapped up nicely in your words.
I love how you've used Minerva McGonagall as your protaganist in your story. She's such a powerful example of a women you can find in literature today. She suffers no one and gets straight to work on what needs to be done. This time, it's making biscuits aka cookies for our beloved werewolf.
Minerva has such a caring soul, even as (in this story at least) she was bullied by the other students at Hogwarts. I'm so glad she'd found a mentor in Edda, the whizened old house elf in the kitchens. That she found the perfect outlet for her sorrows in making a sweet treat. It seems even house elves can be mentors also. (Look at how Dobby affected Harry's life in the short span he was in it!)
There were so many surprises in your vignettes through out the story. That Remus admitting he wanted to be a teacher (professor) was haunting. Poor kid knew he stood little chance to be anything in this magical world because of the prejudges of the world they lived in. Soo sad!
Then you revealed that Minerva had another favorite. Sirius Black. But why wouldn't she? He was the perfect rebel in her House. He was breaking the mould of the House Black like his cousin Andromeda did when she met, fell in love and married Ted Tonks, a muggleborn.
It had to have hurt extremely when the news broke out (wrongly) that he'd murdered (For the Dark Lord) James, Lily and Peter. How could she have been so wrong? (Newsflash, she wasn't, but it would take another decade plus for that to be revealed).
Throughout this story, you've shown her a fighter, willing to stand for her convictions. Even with the loss of her dear Dorcas she continued on (as we know) even with that pain that has bowed many to the knee. She grieved, yes, but she continued on in her most Professor Minerva McGonagall way.
The ending though, was what made me squee with happiness. Even if Minerva didn't realize who her savior was, I have an inckling - Severus Snape. (Poke me if I'm wrong!) So glad she was saved either way, because she's needed to fight further in the battles that are coming.
It was just perfect that Snape would continue keeping his secret status even as he helped where he could.
Again, I loved this story! <3juls
Sometimes thigs don't work how you would expect...
Written for 2015 House Cup on HPFF
A lovely story of brotherly love. I can't say how much I enjoyed it. I'm not used of reading in 'you', but I did catch on that it was Albus - or I was Albus? I haven't read much of the next generation, so that is why I picked it.
It was cute, the lack of flobberworm race. Possibly should have picked bowtruckles that the younger cousins went in search of. Fantastic Beasts (the movie) gave me a love for those little, animated sticks, so I too, would have gone with Hugo and Lily to look for them.
I loved the family dynamics shown at the end. Harry so easy to allow the mischief his sons got into, Ginny having to play the heavy in the punishment, and the implusable story given for why they had a bit of dirt on their pants. In that. it looks James takes after his reporter-mother's instinct for writing.
Great job, and I look forward with anticipation on the next story I read <3
Hey, Juls! :)
I'm glad you enjoyed this little story. :) I honestly love writing in second person a lot, even if it usually works better with angst... I used it here only because it accentuated the suspance at the beginning... I wanted to trick the reader in believing something would actually happen... :P And yes, I guess you were Albus, in a way... :P I don't read or write next gen much either, but for this piece I thought the Wotter clan would just work so well...
I think I would've enjoyed going after bowtruckles better, too. ;) And yes, I get what you mean... Pickett was just so cute, wasn't he?
Ahahah! I think Harry would be just too amused by his children's mischief, while Ginny would be very much like Molly. :D And yes, James does have a fervent imagination... maybe he will be a writer one day, who knows? :)
Thank you so much for the lovely review and the swap!
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Rue has left home to 'play a game', and her sister misses her. Nights have become darker in her absence- she just wants her to come back.
A Hunger Games story
Hey there! Here for review tag!
I picked this story because A) it wasn't Harry Potter, and B) because it was for the Hunger Games. I haven't read any fanfiction for the Hunger Games before and Rue was one of my favorite characters in the books and the movies.
I had the chance to read all three books before I went to see the movie. (Jammed that session in about four days. It was sad and fantastic at the same time.) When Rue showed up in the books, I thought she had a good chance because she was so crafty, and her hiding skills were pretty good. Unfortunately, she didn't survive (like so many of the other innocent characters.)
The scene where Katniss lays the flowers around her and sang was very poignant, and I'm sure if your Rosie had been able to see that, it would have helped her through the morning period. I feel for Rosie and her parents, because they (the parents) know that sooner or later, Rosie and their other children will have to go through that 'reapy' thing. If they get chosen, and there always is a good possible of that, your significance of the candle (lit then unlit) will happen once more.
You managed to write a fabulous story, my dear. It's a perfect companion to the first novel/movie, and we get to see a side of the story that wasn't shown.
I feel for poor Rosie.
I loved Rue, she was also my favourite character- I remember having to put the book down reading that Marvel threw his spear because it was so sudden and ugh, SO SAD. I agree with you on Katniss singing for her and laying the flowers; it was very touching and also, I think, really emphasised how special the relationship they had was, because I don’t imagine she would have done exactly the same for anyone else, save Prim.
Thanks for the lovely review <3
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Destiny is the result of people's choices. And any single choice can change it completely.
In this AU the Marauders are still alive and free (more or less...), Neville Longbottom is the guy with the scar, and Harry... Well, just read and find out!
Golden Chalices 2018 winner: best dialogue
FROGS 2019 second place: best family
Back for another review swap!
Gotta love a great Quidditch Match, and a great save by Jimmy with Neville. It had to have been scary to fall like that, and just as scary to watch your friend fall also. But, Snape did save the day along with Jimmy, so all is good.
I'm glad that Jimmy was able to get Ron to accept (if not willingly) Neville being a part of the team. That Snape see a shade of Marauder by the sight them huddled together I guess should be expected. Maybe he'll figure it out soon? Being a Snape fan myself, I can't wait to see that bit unfold.
Poor Lily! Nightmares are never a good thing, unsettling even. That she worries that she'll lose her daughter like her son is saddening. Wish I could say her fears weren't to be expected, but the Dark Lord approaches somewhere in the story. Eventually, down the road.
I'm glad that Jimmy and Peter made up. As the only father Jimmy knows, he needs him. I'm also glad that Peter is feeling guilt over taking Jimmy. Though we all know what happened to Jimmy's real parents if he'd stayed with them, it just feel right that Jimmy doesn't know who his real parents are. (Even if he did get the bonus of not having to live with the Dursleys.)
I feel for Neville also, because his parents died the way Harry's had in the original storyline. But, isn't death better than wasting away in the long term ward in St Mungo's anyhow?
Okay - on to the next chapter.
Welcome back, Juls! :D
Poor Neville... he did get a big scare there... thank Merlin for Jimmy for catching him, and for Snape for contrasting Quirrell's jinxes... ;)
Ron and Neville will never fully get along, but they will get to care about each other deeply. Ron is a bit of an idiot, and way too stubborn, but he has a good heart. :)
Snape doesn't really know what's going on... except that those four will drive him crazy... I do have too much fun with his obsession with the Marauders... :P
I think every parent who has lost a child would be terrified at the idea of it happening again... poor Lily, indeed... but she doesn't really have any reason to worry. Not right now, at least.
Jimmy definitely had a better childhood than canon Harry had... and Peter does care for him deeply, despite all the lies and the fact that he kidnapped him... (he has a lot to be forgiven for...) Anyway, I'm glad that you are glad they made up for now. ;)
Poor Neville... :( I'm not sure what is better, actually... for Neville, at least. For Frank and Alice I guess it's better to be dead, rather than tortured to insanity... both are pretty terrible, actually... :(
Thank you for another great review! :D
Back for part two of the review swap! (Thanks so much for doing this with me.)
I like the dynamics of this chapter. How Harry meets his long lost son without realizing who he is. How's he built a 'friendship' with Peter enough to mention it to Jimmy. One day soon I think that whole can of worms is going to burst open and splatter them all. The fall out is going to be marvelous. Really. I hope. Oh, Merlin... it's going to be just a mess.
That Jimmy is figuring it out from what the Sorting Hat said during his sorting makes him one smart cookie. Well - Harry was more inpulsive and reactive, so will he allow himself time to think it before he goes off, storming what ever castle is in his way?
I love the meeting between Dumbledore and James. I'm 99 percent sure that Dumbledore knows exactly who Jimmy is and still keeping it a secret. For now, at least.
AND - OH MY MERLIN - Snape and James. The stuff of fantasies. I love the fact that Auror James finally apologied to Professor Severus. I'm pretty sure he meant it too. Too much to hope thay could become (if not friends) acquaintances? Too much dreaming, I guess...
Anyhow - absolutely fabulous chapter.
Hi, Juls! Back again to reply to some reviews... :P
I'm so glad you liked James and all the dynamics between him and the other characters in this chapter! :) And yes, it's going to be a huge mess once the truth will come out... but you'll see as you read on... ;)
Jimmy is just as impulsive as canon Harry is, and it will show later. :P But yeah, he's pretty smart, too. And he will figure it out, with some help from his friends, of course. ;)
I'm glad you liked the confrontation between Dumbledore and James as well, especially because it's the part of the chapter I'm most uncertain about... Dumbledore likes to keep his secrets, as always... but he doesn't actually know who Jimmy is, although he might have suspicions...
I love the dynamics between adult James and Severus. :D No, they will never be friends, but I have faith they will come to respect each other, at least.
Thank you so much for the awesome review! <3 <3 <3
Oh, my! (I've decided to read a couple of chapters before doing a review. I'm here for a bit of review tag, my dear!)
How, just how could you put poor Neville in Slytherin? Poor bloke is not going to catch any breaks there, and it seems like Draco Malfoy is the same, nasty as can be. But, I have a feeling I'll figure out what's up with Neville being in Slytherin eventually.
As for the Sorting Hat, poor thing also. I have a feeling Jimmy there wants to burn it in a pyre for revealing his paternity to him. But, I'm glad to see, (unlike poor Neville) he, at least, as some back up with the Weasley twins and Ron being his friends.
I like the flip on Neville being the boy who lived this go around. I've always thought that there was just a hair between them on who got to receive that title. Both were equally eligible for it. That Lestrange went for the Longbottoms and Voldemort for the Potters could have easily gone the other way.
AND - what happened in Deathly Hallows certainly supports that, for Neville is the one that took out the last Horcrux. So, maybe in a way, they were both, together, the answer to the prophesy?
I love Snape, and it looks like he's going to give them all hell for the next few years. I'm looking forward into reading some more of this story.
Hey, Juls! :)
Ah, I'm so glad you've decided to check Jimmy out, and that you've read a few chapters already! This is my current main focus and I'm always glad when people stop by! <3
Yes, I know... poor, little Neville... but it is kind of fitting with some traits of his personality in this universe... and there is that little bit of Voldemort's soul to consider... he wouldn't fight half as hard as Harry did in canon to be put somewhere else, so... but yes, he's going to have a hard time fitting in... :(
Ahahah! Jimmy probably would want to burn it... :P He does have a great support net, at least. In that aspect he's quite lucky. :)
Yes, it could've easily been Neville instead of Harry and I think it can be interesting to see how everything would have worked out if it had been the other way. As for them both being the answer to the prophecy... I see your point about DH, but I think ultimately it was Harry in canon (I mean, multiple people destroyed the Horcruxes, and yes, Neville's actions in DH were heroic, but it's Harry's sacrifice that ultimately defeated Voldemort... if you know what I mean? Anyway...)
I'm not the biggest fan of Snape, but I do have fun writing him in this story. Yes, he's going to give the hell, but I guess the opposite is true, too, so I can't completely blame him... :P
Thank you so much for this great review! :D
More secrets revealed!
So, anyhow, I liked this chapter. I'm still confused (and, yeah, I am supposed to be still!) about what actually happened. The bits and pieces are still unfolding, ever so slowly.
I was amazed to see James still alive, and Sirius out and about and NOT in Azkaban. I know the answers are coming on that... so, we shall be patient. One major question is - is Lily still alive and this Dor's mother? (I suspect not, but you've been surprising me as we go!) Or, who did James marry after and is mum to this Dor? Again... patience. *smiles*
Okay! Next chapter to hopefully get a few answers!
Hey, Juls! :)
Yes, I do reveal a lot in this chapter. ;)
I'm glad I surprised you with James and Sirius here. Obviously, there is a reason for everything. As for Lily and Dor... yes, you'll have to read on and find out. ;)
Thank you for the review! :)
Narnia is one of my favorite places also!
In a way, Canon Neville was pretty much an orphan also, with his parents sufferring under the curse that Bellatrix and the other Death Eaters inflicted on the elder Longbottoms. That just one of the other ways that makes me think that both Neville and Harry were the prophesied ones of Trelawny's prophesy (and that is why Dumbledore did his best to make sure no one knew EXACTLY what was in it.
It's nice to see that even with things out sorts between Jimmy and Neville, Neville still went out of his way to try and warn him (that would be the Gryffindor in him.)
Also, Ron's warming up to Neville? Good deal.
Hi again! :)
I really enjoyed Narnia, we are together in this. :)
Yes, canon Neville is sort of an orphan, too... his canon backstory is actually so sad... :(
Neville has a pretty strong Gryffindor side... and he does care for Jimmy deeply, even if he disagrees with him on many things (or on one thing... either way...)
And yes, Ron is warming up to Neville, too. ;)
Thank you for another lovely review, dear!
Hey there! I'm back, this time review for the Magical Menegerie 2019.
So the Portmans are going to move just down the road from the Potters. AND in the house that the Dumbledores used to live in. That's a cool twist! I wonder if the house is haunted like everyone thinks it is?
Well, is it? I guess I'll be finding out shortly. Right?
I have to ask, did Peter kidnap Harry so he could have a kid or to keep him safe? That is my ongoing question. Selfish or heroic? I hope heroic, but with Pettigrew one can never tell.
And - Dorea. Harry has a little sister and Peter robbed her of having a big brother and robbed him of having a little sister. Robbed Lily and James of having a complete family. That more than kinda sucks right there.
Just one total grammer comment here - the word you're using, foul, should actually be fool. (The English language can be nutters at times for look-a-like words.)
Again - another lovely chapter! <3juls
Hey, Juls! Welcome back! And sorry for the late reply!
Yeah, the Portmans are moving close to the Potters... Nah, the house isn't haunted, people just assumed something was wrong with it because of everything that happened to the Dumbledores... but there's nothing actually wrong with the house itself. ;)
Peter kidnapped Harry because... he thought it was the best thing for everyone... even if it obviously wasn't and he could've done much better... he definitely didn't kidnap Harry so he could have a kid, though. I think at the time the last thing Peter would have wanted was to raise a child...
Yeah, as I said, Peter did a lot of damage to the Potters... :/ But he did have good intentions, at least?
Yeah, I know... I was told already, but I'm too lazy to go back and fix it... maybe one day I'll edit that (and a few other mistakes that I've caught myself around...) English is hard... :(
Thank you so much for a great review! <3
I'm here (a wee bit late!) for our review swap! Continuing on where I left off.
Oh that dang troll! But, it did bring them all together in the books and now in your story. Knowing how it got in there in the books, it's still scary. That they went to save know it all Hermione even though they really didn't like her speaks volumes to their Gryffindor courage (or blind stupidity!) but hey, they all lived, and that was one of the important things.
They're getting closer to figuring out how to save the day. I can't wait until then - and I have too many chapters to read and review to get there. I love your story, it's amazing.
Juls! Hello, dear! And sorry for the late reply...
Some things are the same in every universe. The effect of fighting a troll in starting friendships is one of those things, I guess. :P
Ahahah! They are a bit stupid... but yay for Gryffindor bravery! :P And yes, they all lived, so all's well that ends well. ;)
They still have a lot to figure out... but they'll get there, no worries. :)
Thank you so much for your lovely review! <3
Hey, Chiara, finally here for that review swap! Sorry it took so long, but I love Jimmy, so I had to come back. Y'know? Okay, on with the show...
This is a poignant chapter to me. It's all those what ifs that pop up when you think of Lily and James not dyiing all those years ago and Harry being able to have his actual parents all his life. Now, I will certainly agree that Harry is far better off as 'Jimmy' and not living with the Dursleys. His bedroom is certainly an upgrade from both the cupboard under the stairs and Dudley's 'second' bedroom.
(all those bookcases! Huge sigh of want.)
I can't say that Harry/Jimmy has suffered for being under Peter's care. He's thrived actually, but still - it wasn't his parents' choice (unless, of course, that is coming up somewhere in future chapters?) that he live with Peter. Their obvious mourning for their son is evident.
Poor Remus! Damn potions cost way too much. Hovering between pride and need, he must have huge shame for having to accept Lily's offer or not have his monthly potion. (There has to be a parallel here somewhere for the current Heath insurance crisis, but... maybe not.) I can certainly understand Remus' medication problem, and I'm just glad he accepted Lily's offer.
Christmas at the Potters. Lovely. What else can I say, right? It shows again just what Harry/Jimmy missed by having his parents die when he was a baby. It wasn't fair then, and it still isn't fair now. I know Peter has loved him and done his best to raise his bestfriends' child the best he could.
Reading how Jimmy is taking it all in was sad. He has an inkling that this is his family (And I do hope that he questions Peter about this now. He is old enough to know everything. And with what is possibly coming, he needs to know to keep himself and his friends safe.) and he's not sure what to say. I just loved reading the interactions between them all.
Wait for it...
Jimmy asks the pertainate question of the chapter...
Golden. Got to admit.
Good job, there, Chiara. I'm looking forward to more that is coming.
Juls!!! So nice to see you back, dear! <3 Sorry for the late reply...
Jimmy definitely had a much better childhood than Harry did. And yes, that bedroom is much better than anything the Dursleys ever gave him... but yes, it's still not fair that he didn't grow up with his real parents... and it's terrible what the Potters went through losing him... :(
Yeah, poor Remus... it is pretty hard for him, not being able to afford the potion and having to rely on his friends' economical support... I'm glad he accepted the offer, too. (And no, I wasn't thinking about the health insurance crisis, although I'm sure there can be drawn a parallel... Italy had a lot of flaws, but one good thing we have is public health care...)
Glad you enjoyed the Christmas lunch at the Potters! :D Yes, Harry did miss out a lot, both in canon and here. Although Peter was a good father for him.
Yes, Jimmy is determined to get his answers now... :P
Thank you so much, your reviews are always so lovely! <3
Hey, Chiara! Bonus review for you!! (Glad I went an extra chapter, by the way!)
The big reveals in this chapter were amazing. Great advancement of the story. From finding out from the Potters that their son had been kidnapped by a former friend to Hermione getting the information on it. Got to love her bookworm ways. The trio (or quartet here) would never had gotten far without her investigative ways.
Forgot to mention in my last review, but those notebooks are ingenious.
I feel for poor Jimmy in this chapter. He's so confused it hurts. Finding out that Peter Pettigrew was a Death Eater (and most likely his dad) has got to the worst thing in the world to him. (Aside of being kidnapped, of course.) Can't wait to read further on this mystery in the coming chapters.
And now... Peter and his own mum. We know she had to have loved him no matter what he did. Still though, you have to feel for the woman. It's kind of like being one of those Wild West mothers trying to be 'right' but still loving their sons even if they were criminals.
You've given Peter's mother life here in this chapter. Shown us how difficult the years must have been for her. Slowly letting her warm back up to Peter being back, even if she doen't approve of what he's done. Listening to Peter's reasoning why he'd turn to the Death Eater life.
But, Peter is no longer that weak willed, acceptance seeking boy. He still needs to return Jimmy to the Potters. That's his kryptonite right there. Losing Jimmy.
But, Jimmy was never truly his to begin with. (Huge sigh)
I'm thinking Dorea also suspects, and can't wait to see what comes next.
Hi again, Juls, my dear! <3
The Golden Trio (or quartet) would have got nowhere without Hermione. :P Happy you liked the advancement of the story in this chapter and the kids putting the pieces together. ;)
Glad you like the diaries too. They did turn out to be useful plot devices, I'll have to admit it. :P
It is so very hard for Jimmy to learn about Peter... he can't be sure if he's Harry Potter yet, but the simple possibility is already so much to take in...
Poor Mary has suffered a lot because of her son, but yes, she still loves him regardless. I think a parent would love their children, no matter what, right? I do love her a lot, and I'm glad you could feel for her!
Peter needs to tell the truth. But it's not easy, for many reasons. Of course, he's worried for his own safety (he's Peter after all), but also he doesn't want to lose his son and he doesn't want to disappoint him... it's just very complicated...
Dorea is a pretty smart kid, too. And you'll see how much later on. ;)
Thank you so much for the wonderful review! <3
Hey, Chiara, I'm here for our review swap. Cause, y'know, I can't resist Jimmy, no how.
This, my dear, was a sad chapter. Death is never easy to take when it's a loved one. Being poor Remus' mother just made it all that much more worse. (Remus, fyi, is my favorite Marauder.) I'm glad he had Sirius there at the pub to talk to. (Best) friends are the most comforting of people.
Nice to see a bit of drama relief in the arrival of the Weasley Twins AKA Gred and Feorge. That was awesome.
Poor, poor Mary Pettigrew. You have to feel for that woman. For years thinking her son was dead had to have been hard on her. Then him popping back had to have been sort of heart stopper. It had to have been hard for her to step out of the house and face the world again - but Sylvia Lupin was the perfect excuse to leave that unwholesome caccoon.
Just in time, it seems. For Sylvia is dying. Right then. Sadness, truly. But it was good for Sylvia to reconnect with her old best friend at that moment. Perfect timing. Still sad though.
And! Back to poor Remus. That dude just can't catch a break anywhere. Lossing his mum without getting to say good bye is one of those haunting things - but Mary can at least pass the message.
Thanks for the lovely, bittersweet chapter my dear.
Hi, Juls! Thank you for swapping and for the lovely review! I'm so glad you are getting passionate about my child's story! <3
Yes, this is a heartbreaking chapter, it was painful even for me to write... :( Death is never easy, and Remus really didn't need this additional blow... at least, he has his friends, right? (Remus is my favourite, too! <3)
I love the twins! Happy that you enjoyed their brief appearence! ;)
Ah, yes, poor Mary... I don't think she ever believed her son to be dead (not in this universe) but she still had to come to terms with the idea that he was a murderer and part of a pureblood fanatics group, which is almost worse? I'm glad she found the strenght to get out again and got the chance to see Silvia one last time, at least! Sad, yeah...
And yes, poor Remus, not even able to say goodbye... I am a bit too cruel to him...
Thank you so much again for the review! <3
Bonus swap review, Chiara! (Cause I need a bit more fix, I guess!)
The train scene was perfect! It was a little bit of sunshine after the last chapter. So glad I continued on. As for Neville, I feel for that poor boy. He became the Boy Who Lived because Peter changed fate by kidnapping Harry. His parents died instead of Harry's parents. But truly - they 'died' too, being in that comatose state for all those years. To me though - both Harry and Neville were the fulfillers of the prophecy, but Harry being out in the open with the lightening bolt scar kept Neville in the background and allowed the less braver time to grow into what he was to become.
The scenes between Mary and Peter and Mary and Remus were lovely. It's nice to see Remus having a little memory party and allowing himself to mourn and remember both of his parents with one of their oldest friends.
As for Peter, he's a lot like Regulas Black to me in this story. Redeemed Death Eater trying to choose a better path, even if what he did was so horrible. Coming back to England and putting himself (and Jimmy) right by the Potters and the other Marauders has got to be the craziest thing. I mean, what's going to happen when he's found out?
It's not going to be pretty, but, in a way, maybe he wants that to happen. I'm not sure.
I'm glad to see his mum loves him unconditionally.
Hi again, dear! <3
This chapter is definitely a bit more lighthearted, glad you enjoyed the platform scene! :) Yes, poor Neville... although, like you said, Alice and Frank's destiny wasn't much better in canon...
Glad you enjoyed the scenes with Mary and Peter and Remus. Poor Remus needed that moment remembering his parents with one of their closest friends...
Peter is trying... although he's probably not doing the best job at making up for his past choices... moving back to England (and to Godric's Hollow of all places) was definitely crazy... he's a bit of an idiot, what can I say... I think that subconsciously, yes, he does want to be found out... but no, it won't be pretty...
Thank you again for the lovely review! <3
Hey there, Chiara, back for our current review swap AND my dose of Jimmy Portman. *grins*
I love this story, and how well you're keeping the characters 'in character' even as you've developed them as your own for your own story. Jimmy still has that hotheaded Harry temper, Hermione still is her bossy know it all self, Ron is still a jerk bumblehead, and Neville is well, Neville. (AS the new on the block Boy Who Lived, he is doing his own twist on it.)
I think the train argument between our set of protagonists was pretty spot on, all things considered. If this a good thing, I wanted to smack Ron - so you're doing it right.
I love how your moving along the story, bits of reveal and doubt in what Jimmy/Harry comes up with. Eventually though the 'real' reveal will come, and all the backlash that come with it. Can't wait. *grins*
And that bit of flirtation by Ron towards Hermione was absolutely perfect. Welcomed even, as he is a dunderhead. (Yeah, I'm not too partial to Ron.)
This was a great chapter! Can't wait to read more. (But I've got some writing to do now.)
Juls!!! Welcome back again, darling! <3
I'm so glad you are enjoying the story and how in character the characters are, despite the universe differences. :)
Ahahah! Poor Ron... I actually love him a lot, but I guess he can be unsufferable at times... :P Glad you found the argument spot on, anyway! ;)
Jimmy is just completely confused right now. And yes, the big reveal will come, and it will be... interesting, I guess? Glad you are enjoying the progression so far! :)
Ahahah! Well, I'm a Romione shipper and I think it shows... :P They are only children right now, so I don't think they are even aware that they are flirting, but... :P
Thank you so much again for the review, always a pleasure! <3 <3 <3
Hello! Here for our review swap! (who can say no to a little Jimmy reading?)
I actually like the addition of Samantha Rossier to the story. I'm never a fan of Pansy, so I'm equally happy to see her a bit in the background of the story.
I can feel for Samantha's sorrow over the loss of her father at a young age. I went through that also, and it does leave A LOT of questions. Some that can never be answered, or you just get falsehoods in response. It's the 'all depends on who is telling the story' situation.
It's lovely to see Hagrid reaching out to her. He hasn't a harsh bone in his body for most, it seems. All the trials and tribulations that Hagrid went through, he can still be such a NICE (sometimes meaning naive) guy. (Possibly why Harry didn't tell him he was alive when they all thought he was dead in the Battle of Hogwarts.)
I've always thought of just how lonely Hermione could be at school herself. Her only friends (for the most part) being Ron, Harry and Neville. (In the books as well as your story.) It's nice to see her developing some sort of out of House friendship. That it is a Slytherin is all that much more shocking, but hey - we're friends, and I'm Slytherin. *grins*
As for Samantha - I'm finding her very well rounded character. I like that she's open to to being friends with a Muggleborn, and at least questioning everything that has been taught to her so far in life.
So - 10/10 my dear, and I'm off to the next chapter.
Hey, I'm back! Second review for our swap! (Thanks so much for the lovely comments on the Dramione)
Let's just say, the beginning of this chapter was pretty mind blowing. You got me - I truly thought Peter had dropped the bag and James was going to kill him. Then, once James was done, it would be Sirius' turn. Then Remus', but no - oh no - with a short breath of relief...
Peter wa just dreaming. Nightmares caused by stress can be, you know, stressful. It's like a revolving door of mysery, and it's hard to break. I'm hoping, with time, there is some sort of reunion for these guys. Your Peter definitely turned out better than JKR's Peter.
It was a little like fangirl squeeing when Sirius finally figured out who Peter Portman was - his favorite gamemaker. It's actually kind of nice to see Peter getting some props for his accomplishments for once.
I see a crush resurfacing. AND - Peter offered Remus a job. Something Remus needs. Maybe this will help Peter figure out how to tell the guys - though, everything will come crashing down when it does.
Again - great chapter!!
What if Peter Pettigrew hadn't escaped at the end of Prisoner of Azkaban?
Here for the EvS review battle!!
This was brill, Rumpels! I could very well see this as the outcome myself if Peter had been caught. Sad for Sirius, Remus, Tonks and Fred (Cedric and many others, too!) that it hadn't. Without the rat's escape, there'd been no reason - at least for now - for anyone to die. JKR did them all an injustice!
Not for us, the readers, though. It's terrible to know that all that misfortune only happened because a rat escaped and set the dominoes tumbling.
I also wonder though, eventually Voldemort would have popped up somehow. Evil can never be contained for long. Out of order, could he possibly have won though? Something we won't ever know, but still, the question lingers.
I've always felt Sirius had been the most cheated of all those effected. His whole adult life had been spent under the abysmal effects of the Dementors. He was thought of as being the one to betray his friends, and he didn't even have Remus to back him up.
Then - he was only free for a short time before his death to be with Harry and mentor him.
So much cloud have been better in our favorites' lives if JKR hadn't been so mean and let that little rat live.
I'm happy you wrote this story, perhaps a wee bit disgruntled that it couldn't have happened this way.
I blame JKR.