Jump to content

Welcome to HPFT

We are a multi-fandom/original fiction community with roots in the Harry Potter fandom community. We strive to maintain a strong focus on author feedback and inclusive writing. Here on the forums, you can join a house and participate in House Cup events, participate in writing challenges, play games, and much more!

Join the Forums

Check out the Archives

HPFT has a moderated multi-fandom/original fiction archive with an unlimited queue. There you can post your writing, as well as read and review other members' writing. Be sure to stop by and check out our latest featured stories!

Join the Archives

Find us on Social Media

HPFT is active on social media. You can find us and many members busily tweeting on Twitter, join us for livestreams on YouTube, check out aesthetics on Instagram, get sneak peeks on Snapchat, and interact on Tumblr! All our social media links can be found below.

News Ticker
  • FROGS Voting is upon us! Cast your vote by 4:59 AM GMT March 6.
Stella Blue

Stella Blue's Reviews

Recommended Posts

Shadowkat678

Hey, Stella!!! :D

[b]Story and Author Name, including RATED link[/b]: Founders Four: Pillars of the Ages (M) by shadowkat678
Advisories: Violence


Genre[/b]: Adventure/action, Angst, Drama, General


Length: 2915 words


Summary:

History speaks to us of four friends, a school they together founded, and a division that still echoes through the stone halls of Hogwarts today. Yet, that great castle was never truly the beginning, and most certainly wasn't the end. Maybe, it's time to find out what the history books didn't tell you.


Ships: Eventually Salazar/Helga, but nothing yet.


Areas of Concern: I'm starting this back up and I'm trying to revise and add to the existing chapters while writing the next ones. I remember when I first posted this three years ago a few people mentioned they had trouble separating the characters, and there were also lots of suggested edits. I want to make sure I have all of that fixed up. Also, just any general constructive criticism you could think of.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

crestwood

With how much I've always loved your reviews, I thought I'd stop by here :yes:

 

Story and Author Name, including RATED link: Things Change [m], crestwood

Warnings and Advisories: Derogatory Language, Domestic Abuse, Eating Disorders, Self-Harm, Substance Abuse, Suicide, Violence

Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance

Length: one chapter, about four thousand words.

Ships: Scorpius Malfoy/OC, but not yet.

Summary: Scorpius Malfoy was a hedonistic misfit with friends to match. They put a lot of time and effort into preserving their reputation as Hogwarts' most unruly bunch.


Little do they know there is actually a lesson to be learned from it all.


Areas of Concern: Basically just, whether this grabs your attention or not! It’s the first chapter of a novel so my main concern is getting people in on the ground floor right now. Anything else you can think to mention would be much appreciated as well :) Thank you!! 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Chemical_Pixie

Ready for another feminist fic? This time, it involves Marlene, Emmeline, and Arabella! :) It's also a companion piece to A Woman's Place.

 

 

Story and Author Name, including RATED link: Actual Magic (m), Chemical_Pixie

Warnings and Advisories: Derogatory Language, Hate Speech, Sexual Content, Substance Abuse, Violence

Genre: Drama, Action/Adventure

Length: one shot, 4,434 words.

Ships: None.

Summary: Arabella takes a stand. Emmeline becomes a target. Marlene misses the Hogwarts Express.
 

Areas of Concern: Your general thoughts. The effectiveness of the inclusion of the essay and the shifting POVs. The characterization of the three women. Stuff like that. Thank you!!!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Stella Blue

Joey and Abby - Finished your reviews!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Shadowkat678
Posted (edited)

*slides back in* Hey, can you guess what just updated??? :P

[b]Story and Author Name, including RATED link[/b]: Founders Four: Pillars of the Ages (M) by shadowkat678 chapter two.


Advisories: Violence


Genre[/b]: Adventure/action, Angst, Drama, General


Length: 3135 words


Summary:

History speaks to us of four friends, a school they together founded, and a division that still echoes through the stone halls of Hogwarts today. Yet, that great castle was never truly the beginning, and most certainly wasn't the end. Maybe, it's time to find out what the history books didn't tell you.


Ships: Eventually Salazar/Helga, but nothing yet.


Areas of Concern: Same as last time. 

Edited by Shadowkat678

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Felpata_Lupin

Hi, Kristin, my love! :wub:

Yes, I know you would get there eventually, but I couldn't resist... :couch:

Story and Author Name, including link: All the truth about Jimmy Portman (M) by Felpata_Lupin

Warnings and Advisories: Consent Issues (Mild/Moderate), Domestic Abuse, Sexual Content, Substance Abuse, Violence

Genre: angst, AU, drama

Length: chapter 35 is 3893 words

Summary: 

Quote

Destiny is the result of people's choices. And any single choice can change it completely.

In this AU the Marauders are still alive and free (more or less...), Neville Longbottom is the guy with the scar, and Harry... Well, just read and find out!

Ships: James/Lily, Peter/Remus

Areas of Concern: As always, I'd just love to know your thoughts. :wub:

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Stella Blue

Finished both of the above :)

  • Thanks 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

ShadowRose

hi kristin! i'm popping in for another one of your lovely reviews :P

Story and Author Name: There Will Be History [m] by ShadowRose
Warnings and Advisories: none, the m rating exists solely because of my propensity for swear words
Genre: romance, humour
Length: 2,350 words
Ships: teddy/victoire
Summary:

Quote

The paper trail between Teddy Lupin and Victoire Weasley (and occasionally Dom) from 9 July to 2 September 2017.

 

Areas of Concern: would just love your thoughts! i've never written a fic exclusively in letters before, so i'm curious how that's panned out 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

MrsDarcy

Hi! I'd really love to get a review from you, is that possible? :$

Story and Author Name: The Anne Clarke Chronicle (M) by MrsDarcy

Warnings and Advisories: profanity, sexual content, discrimination, violence 

Genre: general, humor, romance 

Words: 2783 

Ships: Remus/OC

Summary: well, it's Hogwarts Era from another POV ^_^

Areas of Concern: It would be great if you reviewed chapter 3, although the first chapter is also fine 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

lovegood27

I remembered how lovely your reviews are, and couldn’t resist popping in for one :P 

 

Story and Author Name, including RATED link: Black Ties (m)

Warnings and Advisories: Domestic abuse

Genre: general, fluff 

Length: 3080 words

Ships: none 

Summary: 
 

Quote

 

So the thing is...I’m gay. Just thought I ought to tell you.

Well, that’s what Sirius imagined he would say when he finally came out to someone anyway.


 

Areas of Concern: Flow (dialogue and just generally), characterisation, the ending (because I’m worried it’s too abrupt)/storyline overall. But to be honest, any feedback you have would be appreciated :) 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

you-make-me-wander

Hi Stella! Can I grab a slot? ^_^

Story & Author Name: The joys of you [M] | you-make-me-wander | (Chapter One)
Fandom / Era: Harry Potter / Next-Gen
Warnings & Advisories:  Mature, Sexual content, Spoilers
Genres:  AU, Drama, Fluff, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Romance, Friendship, Family
Length: Multi-chaptered novel, on-going. Requested chapter (Chapter One) is 3064 words long
Ships: Scorpius/Rose , Draco/Astoria, Ron/Hermione, Harry/Ginny, Albus/OC, Lily/Lysander, Hugo/OC & James/O C
Inclusivity: Gay, Anxiety, Depression, Dying/grieving
Summary: Scorpius comes back home after being four years away studying wandlore. Finding Astoria already affected by the curse that'll most likely kill her, Scorpius must learn how to deal with the inevitable loss and grief it'll bring, reconnecting with old friends and family, and with making sure that Rose knows that he's never stopped loving her.
Areas of Concern: Overall flow and opinion of the story and its plot.

Thank you :wub:

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Recent Badges

Stella Blue

Finished both of the above!

  • Thanks 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Shadowkat678

Hi again, Stella!

Story and Author Name, including RATED link: Sirius Black: Escape from Azkaban (T) by Shadowkat678

Warnings and Advisories: Spoilers

Genre: Action/Adventure and Angst

Length:  4031

Ships: None

Summary:  Sirius Black escaped the inescapable, and is experiencing emotions he hasn't gotten the chance to feel in a very long time. Yet, with Aurors on his tail, there isn't much time to waste. 

Areas of Concern: This is my oldest oneshot and I revamped it a bit. Just kinda want general feedback and to see if I missed any errors.

Edited by Shadowkat678

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

MuggleMaybe

Hello dear! Since you're all caught up, I can't resist requesting a review on Beyond Repair ❤️ 

Author Name: MuggleMaybe

Story Title and link:  Beyond Repair, Ch 12: Sandcastle (T)

Warnings and Advisories: None

Genre: Angst, Drama, Fluff

Length: Short story collection (WIP; 16 chapters so far)

Summary: Lily and Petunia were more than sisters; the were best friends. And then, they weren't.

Ships: none in this chapter - eventual Lily/James, Petunia/Vernon

Areas of Concern: Just looking for people's honest opinions of it, really. I am going to really truly try to finish this fic in the next few months (famous last words, I know), and I think getting some solid feedback will help keep me motivated. CC welcome!

Thank youuuuu ❤️ 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Stella Blue

Kat, your review is done! Renee, I might be able to get to yours tonight, but if not, I'll get it when I am back off the mountain in a few weeks! Thanks for your patience :)

  • Like 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Stella Blue

Update: Renee, yours is done too!

  • Like 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

ReillyJade

Hi there! I'd love to hear your thoughts on this, if that's okay! ❤️ Thank you!

Story and Author Name, included RATED link: June Bug (M) by ReillyJade

Warnings and Advisories: Derogatory Language, Consent Issues (Mild), Sexual Content, Substance Abuse

Genre: Drama, Hurt/Comfort, Angst

Length: One-shot, about 8k

Ships: no main ships, but Teddy/Victoire and Bill/Fleur are present

Summary: As far as Louis Weasley is concerned, life couldn't be better. He has his family, a decent job, and Tessa, his not-quite-girlfriend. In a few months, he'll have enough money saved up to buy a place of his own. His life is right where he wants it to be. But life, as it so often does, has other plans.

Areas of Concern: This is the first brand-new thing I've written in a long time, and I'm worried this story makes it obvious that I've been out of the game for a while. Is the pacing okay? Is it overly predictable/cliche/etc.? Is it a dumpster fire? 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

galadriel

hello! ❤️ i'd love one of your amazing, super helpful reviews if you feel like dropping by this fic.

Story and Author Name, including link: Out of the Shadows (M) by Theia

Warnings and Advisories: Consent Issues (Severe), Derogatory Language, Hate Speech, Self-Harm, Violence

Genre: Angst, Action/Adventure, Hurt/Comfort

Length: 2 chapters at present - 6620 words in total. the first chapter is 2424 words. 

Summary

The Ministry has fallen. Families are destroyed. Students are on the run.

In the midst of Voldemort's reign of terror, Ginny Weasley returns to Hogwarts.

Areas of Concern:

i'd love to know your thoughts on the characterisations, plot and flow. my main concern is whether my chapters are believable wrt canon events so any comments you may have would be great.

thank you! ^_^ 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Recent Badges

bsk

Hi Stella, I'm new here and was wondering if I could get a highly coveted review from you if slots are open :) 

Story & Author Name/Rated Link: Smells Like Teen Spirit by Bsk

https://hpfanfictalk.com/archive/viewuser.php?uid=1566 
Warnings/Advisories: Derogatory Language, Sexual Content, Substance Abuse, Violence
Genre: Romance, Humor
Length: 27163 words, 4 chapters so far and one more is in the queue
Main Characters: Zara Patil-Preece, James Sirius Potter
Ships: James II Potter, OC
Summary: She's blunt, cynical, and alluring. He's cocky, bold and far too handsome for his own good. But maybe a little darkness was needed to see the stars.
Areas of Concern: Content & characterization! I just hope its flowing nicely, doesn't seem too cliche. I'm always nervous that characters may seem one dimensional if that makes sense. I was really nervous to put my story out there so I really want some feedback. Thanks!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Shadowkat678

Story and Author Name, including link: The Book Girl, by shadowkat678 

Warnings and Advisories: T and none.

Genre  Fairy Tale/Fable, General

Length: 797 words

Summary: "This is the story of a girl named Emily. Perhaps you've heard of her, and then again maybe you haven't. If you hadn't met her, allow me to introduce you to the one many know simply as, "The Book Girl"."

Ships: NA

Areas of Concern: It's been a good few years since I wrote this and I'm thinking about re editing this again, so any grammar or spelling mistakes would be good to look at. This was made to be more of a fairytale feel to it. In fact, it was written specifically for an assignment having to do with writing in the style,  so it'd be good to see how I did on that.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Stella Blue

Hello! I'm back from the mountains now, and all of the above reviews are completed!

  • Thanks 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

StarFeather
Posted (edited)

Welcome back from the mountain!

Story and Author Name, including RATED link: A Harper (T)  by StarFeather
Warnings and Advisories: Consent Issues (mild), Hate Speech
Genre: Angst, Hurt/Comfort
Length:  1469 words
Ships: none 
Summary: Mr. Finnigan  stayed at his brewery as if he would avoid sharing information of the magical world that Seamus and his mother belonged to. 
Areas of Concern:I thought of the plot after I heard a lecture about Irish history. I don't have confidence whether I did it right. I will really appreciate for any advice. 
Edited by StarFeather

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Alwynse

Hey there Stella~~

Story: How Can I Not (T) by javu/Alwynse

Warnings: Mild consent issues (mention of a girl's skirt being pulled down)

Genre: Action/Adventure, AU, Dark/Horror, Drama, Fluff, General, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Romance

Length: 9616

Ships: James/Lily

Summary: Ever wonder how James and Lily's story would have played out if they were American high schoolers at an end-of-the-year amusement park trip? Note: story contains whizzing peanuts and scary clowns.

Areas of Concern: I would love a critique of what you thought was funny/fun and what wasn't (but you could tell I was trying to make it funny). And a critique of what was and what wasn't a believable, realistic character interactions. And just what you thought in general. 

Please and thank you!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites


  • Recently Browsing   0 members

    No registered users viewing this page.

×