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Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 11:27 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Duckie's Drabbles Chapter: The Prophecy

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! I enjoyed the last drabble quite a bit, so I thought I'd come take a look at this one as well!

 

Uh oh. Elena and Danny are definitely not supposed to be stealing things from their father's work bag. I feel like it's even worse because it's a prophecy and those are very delicate. I'm not really sure why there dad even has it with him. It should be in the hall of prophecies.

 

Ah smart kids! Yes, go listen at the doorway. It'll be interesting to see what they hear.

 

Yikes! That ending was...intense. I imagine if I was working in the hall of prophecies and I came across one with my kid's name on it, I'd probably want to know what it said too. I can see why he ended up bringing it home. Now, I wonder if it's a good or bad prophecy.

 

This opens up a good question. What do Unspeakables do if they find prophecies that involve them or a family member? I imagine that would be quite tempting.

 

Good job! Your writing skills always amaze me. You do such a good job of writing a story in such a short word constraint.

 

~Kaitlin

 



Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 11:13 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Duckie's Drabbles Chapter: Ashes in the Attic

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! Duckie! I was sorting through the stories posted and I was super excited to see one of your stories pop up! I had to come give it a read!

 

Ooh. This is a really interesting piece. It's quite curious that there would be some random person's ashes in the attic. I mean that's not the sort of thing most people would normally forget about, unless there was no one left to remember the ashes, which is pretty tragic.

 

It's even more interesting that the main character finds the ashes when he's three and at twenty five he still doesn't know who they belong to. Does he ever tell his mom that he found them? Does he look into who this lady was that owned the house? Maybe the local library would have some sort of record?

 

And that ending! I wonder what happened to the ashes. Did his mum find them and toss them out? Gosh. I hope not. That seems kind of awful. Was it the ghost of the person who used to belong to the ashes? That would make this sort of creepy.

 

Good job! I'm impressed with how rich of a story you were able to create in such a short word count.

 

~Kaitlin

 



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