Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 31 Jan 2021 06:34 AM · For: The Prophecy

Another spooky drabble!!

This one has an added element of mystery to it since we know that the only people who can take prophesies are the ones the prophesies are made about. So that implies that maybe the prophesy is about both Elena and her dad. Or he's an Unspeakable who knows a way around that particular rule.

I love how creepy the Order of the Phoenix movie made the Hall of Prophesy. The Department of Mysteries in general is a super weird place, but the looming shelves in the set design of the Hall of Prophesies is particularly haunting. This story evoked some of those same feelings.

You did a great job in both the last drabble and this one of creating a mood of tension through your words. In this one, that shows in the warnings about not dropping the prophesy, in the fragility of the glass and the resonance of the kitchen door closing.

Really good job!

Best,
Emily


*for the Fairyland review event*

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 31 Jan 2021 06:28 AM · For: Ashes in the Attic

Hello there!

I've been meaning to leave at least one review for every 'Puff, and I somehow hadn't reached your stories until just now! I think I might have read this drabble before, so I'm excited to review it.

This is such a spooky story. There's something so eerie about both things-in-places-they-shouldn't-be and also things-not-in-places-they-should-be. This somehow does both and it makes it extra creepy. Not knowing whose ashes were in the attic or where they've gone since the last time the boy looked...yikes. And the mother's cagey answers...extra yikes.

(Unless, maybe, there were never ashes in the urn to begin with? Sometimes children invent details without meaning to...)

Either way, this is such a good story. The mood is consistent throughout and really emphasizes just how creepy everyday things can be. Well done!

Best,
Emily


*for the Fairyland review event, Over the Bridge*

Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 06:27 PM · For: The Prophecy

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! I enjoyed the last drabble quite a bit, so I thought I'd come take a look at this one as well!

 

Uh oh. Elena and Danny are definitely not supposed to be stealing things from their father's work bag. I feel like it's even worse because it's a prophecy and those are very delicate. I'm not really sure why there dad even has it with him. It should be in the hall of prophecies.

 

Ah smart kids! Yes, go listen at the doorway. It'll be interesting to see what they hear.

 

Yikes! That ending was...intense. I imagine if I was working in the hall of prophecies and I came across one with my kid's name on it, I'd probably want to know what it said too. I can see why he ended up bringing it home. Now, I wonder if it's a good or bad prophecy.

 

This opens up a good question. What do Unspeakables do if they find prophecies that involve them or a family member? I imagine that would be quite tempting.

 

Good job! Your writing skills always amaze me. You do such a good job of writing a story in such a short word constraint.

 

~Kaitlin

 

Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 06:13 PM · For: Ashes in the Attic

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! Duckie! I was sorting through the stories posted and I was super excited to see one of your stories pop up! I had to come give it a read!

 

Ooh. This is a really interesting piece. It's quite curious that there would be some random person's ashes in the attic. I mean that's not the sort of thing most people would normally forget about, unless there was no one left to remember the ashes, which is pretty tragic.

 

It's even more interesting that the main character finds the ashes when he's three and at twenty five he still doesn't know who they belong to. Does he ever tell his mom that he found them? Does he look into who this lady was that owned the house? Maybe the local library would have some sort of record?

 

And that ending! I wonder what happened to the ashes. Did his mum find them and toss them out? Gosh. I hope not. That seems kind of awful. Was it the ghost of the person who used to belong to the ashes? That would make this sort of creepy.

 

Good job! I'm impressed with how rich of a story you were able to create in such a short word count.

 

~Kaitlin