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Yes! Deer puns! Give me all the deer puns, please! :D
(Yes, back again for the review event :P)
So, which parts of the tabloids are made up and which parts are real? And what is it that James is hiding? Actually, is he even hiding anything? But why did he disappear the way he did? He has a point, though, he's allowed to make his decisions and to enjoy a one-night-stand from time to time, as long as the other person is okay with that, too... so Lily has really no reason to criticize him, especially considering she's done the same? But, as I said some reviews ago, that's not the true reason she's so angry at him, so... I hope they will properly talk at some point and clarify things. There's no reason to keep fighting like that. But I guess they are in the book-tea shop? At least, they started a conversation that wasn't immediately turning into an argument? Maybe? And maybe James will have a chance to explain himself? I suppose I'll need to come back again and see in the next chapter...
Oh, the run-in with Sirius was great! I loved the interaction, even if it was a bit awkward... oh, and some side wolfstar... you know I'm always up for that! ;) I'm glad my boys are doing good, having jobs that they like, moving on with their lives... I'm sorry the fracture with James alienated Lily from the whole group, but it's nice of Sirius to make the invitation, I'd love to see that dinner, so I hope we'll see it in some later chapter :) And I'm so glad Sirius encouraged her to hear James out... I'm sure it will help all of them... ;) (Btw, I love that James has a very specific mood when it comes to Lily :P That bit amused me :P) Oh, speaking of which... "Trust me when I say I don't want you that way at all." / "Trust me, you've made that very obvious." What did James mean there? Is it that the reason he left, because he thought Lily wasn't interested? Or am I reading too much into that?
I loved the Animagi confession!!! Of course, Lily would've figured out Remus' secret, and of course she would be scared about the boys going out with the full moon... I loved her reaction to the revelation, how she was incredulous, but also touched that they would go to such lenghts to help their friend. And I loved the way she was feeling about her proximity to James... they are so cute!!! <3 <3 <3
Another wonderful chapter, I'm loving this story more and more!
I will be back, hopefully soon! <3
Snowball hug,
Chiara
Hello again! :)
Okay, I love the flashback episode in this chapter, it's so sweet! The bit of Lily's favourite colour, and it being James' eyes' colour... aww!!! And I love that he showed her the Map... and the Cloak! :O And the way he got her involved in his mischief and she claimed it was fun, instead of getting irritated... I love it! James was so sweet in that scene, too! <3
I love the story of Lily's cover within pureblood society! The idea that some old pureblood hated their way of living so much that he asked Dumbledore for help and got Lily introduced in the group in exchange, it's so cool! I loved the descriptions of the party and of Lily's disguise and how she used her talent of charming people (and pureblood culture's sexism... I mean, it's sad and irritating, but 100% believable and incredibly useful in this situation) to get the info she needed... I love how you built that subplot, it's so interesting!
Wow, Lily is one devilish coach! :P I love how you write the technical aspects of the training sessions, too! And wow, James is really fit, isn't he? And someone finds it rather attractive... I mean, who wouldn't? :P Keep being in denial, Lily, it's okay... :P
So, James was caught in some other scandal, and Lily is still angry at him for getting so defensive about that earlier... I wonder what's up with that, if anything at all... :P
Another great chapter! See you on the next soon! :D
Snowball hug,
Chiara
Back for more event reviewing! :D
Oh... so Lily is in the Order! I wondered if the Order was a thing at all in this universe... and, a spy? Under a different identity? Calypso Selwin, I'm guessing? Oh, this is so unexpected and so intriguing! And I bet so dangerous for Lily, but that's very obvious... I wonder if James is an Order member, too, and they just don't know that the other is involved...
Speaking of James, did he tell the truth? Were the tabloids exaggerating his out-of-the-pitch misbehaviour? I mean, that wouldn't be at all strange, to be fair... but also, Lily isn't actually angry at him about that, is she? She's angry that he disappeared and broke any contact with his old friends and life... and her. And he probably should have figured it out, and maybe even apologized for that. I wonder if he's truly not seeing it? Does he think it isn't that big of an issue? Again, I would give anything to get into his head for a little while... :P I don't fully blame him for getting angry in turn, though. Lily does seem quick to judgement... but also... I'm conflicted here... :P
Benjy! Hello, there! :) He seems to have a pretty clear picture of what Lily's going through... and of course Lily is in complete denial. :P I like this no-attackment relationship they have going. I mean, I'm not very much into that sort of things, but if that's what both parties want, why not? It's certainly another unexpected side to Lily's personality! ;)
Another great chapter! I'll be back in a minute! :)
Snowball hug,
Chiara
Hi, Taylor! Here for the review event, and another chapter of this fascinating Jily fic! :D
Okay, first of all a question... HOW did Lily get the coaching job? You mention the way she got it a couple of times and made it sound like something... unorthodox, to use Lily's own words... and it sparkled my curiosity... I suppose you'll elaborate on that later? :P
Oh, and they've met, despite Lily's best attempts at avoiding it... but it had to happen sooner or later, right? ;) And, wow, James has truly grown attractive, hasn't he? Loved that description, so hot! Poor Lily, having to come to terms with all that... and she snapped at him, which is totally not surprising. I wonder what James was thinking in that moment... he didn't seem to be expecting it, and I wonder if he knows why Lily is so angry and if he does feel guilty, or if in his head he has nothing to feel guilty about... knowing James, it could easily be both... I suppose I'll need to read on to find out that, too... :P
And speaking of James through Lily's eyes... the way she was admiring him later, during practice... James' Quidditch talent is nothing new, either, but I bet he would be a real spectale to watch, and I can't blame Lily at all for being so mesmerized there! I bet he would be so fascinating on a broom!
The official introduction later was amusing. Of course James was being all smug like that... :P But again, I have to wonder what he was truly thinking... was he really trying to unnerve Lily on purpose? And why did he pretend like they were nothing more than acquaintances? Why didn't he mention that he was Head Boy with her? I mean, it would've been awkward and maybe just not worth getting into with Harrison, but I still wonder what was going on inside his head. I love Lily's pov, don't get me wrong, but I'm just curious to know what's going on on the other side... :P
If this is a game, I'm curious to see who's going to come out victorious. :P
The flashback was so sweet! That's the James I love, dedicated, wanting to do things at the best of his abilities, a bit awkward and not sure why Dumbledore chose him as Head Boy in the first place (I mean, we all wondered that, James, but Lily's explanation of it actually makes sense. James is a born leader and he has good principles and if you think of it that way he is a great choice). And I love that he wanted to meet Lily in advance to share the news with her, and I love that he asked for her help to understand his new role. It's very mature of him. I wonder how and why it all went wrong... :/
Another great chapter! Thank you for writing and sharing! <3
I will be back! Snowball hug for now!
Chiara
Hello, Taylor, dear! Here with a little late gift for your wishlist! I know you said you are more into Six of Crows and more active on AO3 now, but I hope you don't mind too much if I came back for some good, old Jily... :P
Oh, James, James... how did you become the classic "bad boy" athlete? Although, to be fair, I would like to hear his version, because I don't think tabloids should be trusted too much... or maybe I just don't want to think bad of him? :P Either way, I'm very very curious to see how this forced collaboration will turn out to be... ;)
Loved the chat between Lily and Marlene, in any case! Perfect best friends' vibes, you can just tell that they've known each other since forever and they can just get each other right away, it's so cool! :D Lily definitely needed the chat and the distraction (although probably not the alcohol...? Or did she? Who knows? :P)
"Potter as in... your Potter?" Love this! And love that they actually had a bet going in Gryffindor House about the two of them... definitely would've happened, lol! :P It's so sad that they never actually got together, especially given how close they got through their last school year... (a lot, if those pictures are anything to go by...) I love the idea of James introducing Lily to Quidditch and secretly training her, and then her joining the Gryffindor team as Seeker! I would've never imagined it, but it's absolutely cool and original and it explains how Lily ended up in her current job! And I know it's not relevant to this story (or at least, I don't think it is) but I love this also because it creates an extra link between Lily and Harry... sorry, I get sentimental about this sort of things...
I feel so much for Lily... there's so much hurt within her... I hate (or love, depends how you put it) the idea that a younger, naiver version of her would've forgiven James, but she's just been abandoned/betrayed too many times to give second chances now... it's harsh, but also so honest and human? Love the deepness of the feeling!
The whole scene of looking through the box of memories was so emotional, too! Those pictures were all so beautiful and significant, and again it saddens me that she ended up burning the whole thing, but I guess it makes sense too... and there was something mesmerizing about the image...
The flashback... so much bittersweetness again! She was so in love with him back then! And yes, he was being a bit irresponsible with all the drinking, but he was also being so charming and lovely... the way he wants her to celebrate because she's the reason they won in the first place... he's so considerate in his own way, and he's clearly so in love with her, too... why did it all go so wrong??? :(
Great chapter! <3
Happy new year and big snowball hug,
Chiara
How can I see a JiLy fic and not stop by to devovour it letter by letter?
I love that this tale opens with Lily playing Quidditch and leading the practice sessions for a change!
Ahh I wonder what happened with the 7th Quidditch player was that left the gaping hole in the middle of the pitch!
I love me some Lily!Quidditch - there's clearly some history in there that got her into it. I love a woman who takes pride in the good work she's done and Lily's got all my cheer on that front! Lily's love for the times she is given autonomy over practice sessions is so relatable to early career days. A few paragraphs in and I feel we already have such a solid picture of who Lily is.
(side note: A shower with honeysuckle-scented steam sounds quite enticing)
Being a woman in a male-dominant field can bring it's own challenges as many are already aware, but I'm sure Lily is going to handle it like a woman!
Aha, we see James Potter joining the team - and Lily's less than favorable thoughts about that. That flashback *chef's kiss* - it had all the elements I love: smitten!Lily, clueless!James, and a foreboding of heartbreak we are clearly going to learn all about so soon.
Ack my new year just got better knowing i have so many more chapters of this story to look forward to!!
Thank you for this so much!!!
~XOXO Vaish (ysh)
Hi Taylor! Here for the race across the galazy.
AAAHHH THEY KISSED
Okay so you wrote that scene really really well, and I’m super disappointed at whatever jerk was banging on the door because I wanted everything to keep going. I also feel like Lily is trying to persuade herself that she doesn’t want anything other than sex with James – she doesn’t sound very convincing at all.
I really liked the pureblood party scene. The image of Rosier explaining Quidditch to Lily made me laugh – it just shows how little he actually knows about her (or genuinely cares about her) that he thinks she doesn’t know anything, even though she is putting on a front. And the mental image of her trying not to correct him when he’s completely wrong was very funny.
The part in the gardens was really good – you did a wonderful job writing Lily and her panic at seeing Snape and then trying to avoid anything dangerous or compromising with Rosier. I’m really curious about how her spying is going to change after this, because if Snape is there regularly it’s going to be a lot more complicated (and also she’s now turned down Rosier, although in a way that he thought it was for normal pureblood reasons).
I loved this chapter and I’ll be back soon!
~Liv
hiya taylor, here for the event <3
of course lily’d rather do things than meet up with james to make sure his uniform fits
its never good when its too easy
of course he’s wearing a white shirt
yeah i can see why she’d associate it with him
i want to know his thought process here
valid
hahahaha i wouldnt expect anything less from him
jealous, are we?
i mean, valid
good point
hes pisseeeed
lily you’ve got things to admit
hahaha james catches on
yeah no maybe you do need to listen to his side instead of jumping to conclusions
maybe do watch where you walk
ah yeah, thats logical
that is a long time
ah, i love that job for sirius
i want to know what that mood is and i can imagine it’d be quite the shock
i doubt thats strange, i mean, sure, in a way it is, but also… he probably wouldnt want you to know?
awww love that for peter
yassssss
im rooting for the two of them
this just makes my heart melt you know
i have no doubt about that
miiight be for the best
mature of you
are you really, lily?
listen to sirius
oh yeah i know that feeling
i want a shop like that
loooooool of course james would have the same spot
same reasoning love it
i wouldnt expect a response other than that from james but eh progress i suppose
loooooool at lily’s comment re the cloak
valid point
of course lily knows and sirius tries to play dumb
of course they could have a silent conversation
i so love their friendship
i so love that about james
looool the pun
i love the puns
lovely chapter!
Hey, back for a galazy review :)
Oh yeah, there are probably a million things that Lily Evans would rather be doing than hunting down James Potter to see if his new uniform fits. And the way he says 'All right, Evans' just like he used to must send chills (or something) down Lily's spine :( And unsurprisingly, they kick off into a row about James and his latest woman...except Sirius seems to think things aren't what they seem - which begs the question; just what is James Potter playing at and why? Or is it just the fact that Lily is back in his life that's turned him into a bit of a bell-end??
And wait - what? The stories that the magazines have been telling aren't true?? :eyes:
But have to say, I LOVE the deer pun at the end after Lily has found out about the boys all being Animagi (with the exception of Remus for obvious reasons).
Another great chapter!
Meera <3
Hi again!
OH! I wondered who Calypso Selwyn was :eyes: Lily's fictional character to act as Dumbledore's undercover spy. It's a dangerous task for anyone, especially a muggleborn; if she gets ousted by the purebloods, she's dead (or as good as). I'm excited to see how she fits it all in with quidditch training, haha! And what will happen when James finds out what she's up to? Will it finally push him into some semblance of concern? I love how messy and wild this story has already got and we're only five chapters in!! Brilliant!!
And James is still at it with a whole host of different women. Yeah, so endearing. And all it'll do is push Lily further away...
I wonder what colours Lily's smoke pellet emitted?
Meera <3
Hi again! Back for another galazy review!
The sexual tension in this story is immense. But I have to say I want Benjy to do one. He might be nice and just a regular no-strings-attached dude, but I need him gone. Because James needs to come back into Lily's life (and drop the ego). Seriously, I can't believe he'd fuck around when he has someone as amazing as Lily; WTF is up with the guy?? Did the fame really go to his head that much? And pulling Lily into a closet - had to laugh at the cliche but it's brilliant here! And 'self-absorbed prick' is a great insult!!
:Eyes: at what danger Dumbledore was asking Lily to involve herself in...
Moving on to the next chapter pronto!
Meera <3
Hi again, I'm back for another galazy review!
OMG, Lily is a goner. Not only has James filled out and taken up weights and now probably has the body to show for it, he knows how much he's got under her skin. It must be pretty unbearable for Lily to have to watch his game play and bump into him or have him drop by her office when he's just showered, dammit!! I am LOVING the tension and promise in this story and at some point, things are really going to kick off between them...possibly during some reminiscing session. Yeah, my quill would have snapped too.
So James has mentioned that Lily was Head Girl, but hasn't said anything about him being Head Boy? I wonder why - is he ashamed of the fact, or does he lose his Head Boyship along the way somehow??
:eyes:
Meera <3
Hi again, back for a galazy review!
Ugh, that's super unfortunate for Lily that James has been sold by Portree and he'll be gracing the Puddlemere pitch, and presumably Lily will have to train him. It's going to be difficult to cast aside their past and a lot of how Lily manages will depend on how James conducts himself. I love the flashbacks and how they contrast with the present day storyline; it's a really effective way to inform the reader about the history at the same time as telling the story. I'm kinda sad Lily has burned all those mementoes after keeping them for so long, but I suppose she wanted to draw a proper line under it.
I will be reading on immediately. You have me hooked!
Meera <3
Hey, I'm here for a galazy review! Congratulations on making the inky finals with this story too - very well done!
OMG I can't believe you've sunk the Jily ship! Well, maybe not sunk it, but torn holes in it...and I want to know what the Hell James Potter did to make Lily hate him so much, left her 'flying through the freefall alone'. I love the fact that Lily's also involved in the world of Quidditch as a coach and I cannot wait to see exactly how you are going to bring these two back together, or if things are going to take a dire turn and they are destined to be apart forever :sob:
I love how you've scene-set this first chapter - it's drawn me in straightaway <3
Great start to this story and I'll be back soon!
Meera <3
i mean like
i respect that lily called him out and i respect that he respects it
and also that then they went and fucked on a desk
i'll leave an actual galazy review later but like i had to say something
galazy etc etc
competence is sexy and so is james (i swear i wrote that before i got to the part where lily explicitly says it)
also i mean like....... at this point i'm not sure that lily's right about it not making any sense? like there is quite possibly more to the story, and also logically it's absurd, but like, that is a think that somebody who felt the way he said he felt would do
(i get why that is not a thought that she's really thinking but ffs lily)
god she is way too surprised that people care about her birthday, she needs a broom on the shoulders from afar or some shit
anyway though i want her shirt
also ffs james if you're trying to destroy yourself you are also doing an outstanding job, at least lily's in some facsimile of denial, it seems like you're not, you're just like "yolo"
i just. james. you guys are fucking in a broomshed.
tbh tho really that's something you maybe should've done at hogwarts, and i think it's really inspiring the way you're making up for that lost time, you really are late
also like tbh flying around and then fucking some hot quidditch player in a shed in the middle of the night seems like a great way to spend a birthday, lily stumbled into a perfect birthday
so like +10000 or whatever
here for falazy
look this is gonna sound kind of bitchy but like... just about done with guys staring at lily without recognizing that she is out of their league and they need to keep their eyes to themselves
like seriously snape fork off with your death eater bullshit
i also often want to smack dumbledore and say "no fucking shit" + also be a goddamn human person rather than a dick, act like you care ffs
ugh dying in the malfoy manor though, that's adding injury to insult, seriously
i absolutely love lily's "i blame james for this being a mess, i'll show him. by ripping off his clothes. yeah, that'll show him."
god though, james, i just cannot. "this is fine now because you don't have feelings for me" james, my dude, like how are you this fucking dense? of course she fucking does, don't be absurd, it's so obvious, you've got to know that, i know she's acting cold but also you don't go at someone like this and pick every fucking fight with them if you don't still have feelings for them??
that does not compute did a bludger hit your head
i know the practice went poorly but i feel like she would've noticed that
although also tbh i can understand panic like that, i have been known to pull shit like that, avoidance over things you care about is an art form that i appreciate in my soul
but still not cool, james
okay, though
(oh right galazy etc)
anyway, okay, though, i super appreciate that james interpreted the breathiness as not necessarily being "take me now" and backed off, like 10/10 solid boundaries and tbh sort of solid communication in a weird way???
also though fucking FINALLY, it took them fucking long enough
and then i forgot to keep reviewing bc i was waiting for that scene in the garden to take a real bad turn, i'm glad it didn't but also feel very strongly that lily's best course of action is to go kiss james again to wipe out the grossness of purebloods
i wrote that and then realized that james is a prueblood (blame missouri) but like you know what i mean, james is a pureblood but he's not part of The Purebloods
also fucking snape ugh, who gave him permission to exist
oooof that sucks, like yeah on one hand there's a lot of issues being sidestepped since benjy's not really her ex but on the other hand this is still not the greatest situation ever for her, especially since there's all maneuvering and lying and shit to create all kinds of headaches
i was about to write "this is exactly why i have never hook up with someone named benjy" and then i realized that i have an ex whose name is too similar to that to reasonably write it, oops
you win this round, branwen of yesteryear
lily whenever you have to remind yourself that you don't care about something, it means you do care about it, people who don't care don't have to convince themselves, it comes naturally
also +100 to mary and also the "can we talk" absolutely made me think initially of james which i'm pretty sure was the intention
so good job
legit i love the buildup of "this could be drama" and then just have it be super anti-climactic, that is the chaotic vibe i fucking live for
okay like i know
i know
i knoww "i was never all that great at being on time" is maddening
i feel like it is not a thing that should have made me cackle in a very "this story is all about me" way or whatever
i know all that, really
but also, i now want "i was never all that great at being on time" to be my excuse every time i fuck shit up, bc mood james
(look i need a character flaw to keep me humble, i'm too perfect otherwise) (obviously)
oh also though, i legit adore the acknowledgments he's tossing out rather than denials, it is one of my favorite strategies to break out in some situations bc it can throw people so off balance
this flashback is filling me (that's supposed to be killing me but see previous comment about the legality of correcting typos in my current location)
i just like. "this is soft and stable, not fireworks and electricity" yeah that's gonna last
yeah this had to end with some all too well, love it
still here for falazy etc etc
yes that was a typo, no i am not correcting it, it would be a crime to correct it
literally
it's a little known crime that's just in missouri bc they wanted to write all covid misinformation off as an elaborate typo
yeah, i'm sticking with that claim that makes complete sense
anyway fuck lily's mom, invite your daughter, esp since two years isn't that long to not go home, and also just ugh praise for dudley isn't a crime but feels like it ought to be
OOOOF yeah that's the problem when your patronus mirrors your boyfriend's or love interest's or whatever's, you break up and damn that's a kick in the stomach every time you try to exist, it's like an unavoidable cornelia street or some shit
(why am i) (i am so sorry) (except not)
"party with james? nah it'll be fine"
{insert jennifer lawrence "yeah okay" gif here}
bc like 1) avoiding someone at work is different, 2) two weeks is not a long track record, 3) lily boarded up windows are still windows, 4) you know that, you just want to get drunk and fight with and/or fuck james while there's minimal expectation that you act professionally
it's so cool the way you describe lily's philosophy on workouts, it's like you know what that's like or something, excellent putting yourself in your character's shoes!!!!1
oh my god the national team!!! congratulations dude that's great, assuming england's national team is better than its football team (look it's on boxing day i've gotta mock the english, it doesn't mean i don't appreciate boxing day matches) (it's a whole thing, whatever)
also like on one hand that might be annoying in general but on the other that experience could still be super useful and also +1000 cannot wait for further friction with james
love the way flashbacks are gut punches wrapped in intrigue and questions, that's exactly the way i like both my gut punches and my intrigue
anyway i love this
hi taylor i'm here bc galazy and also i hate everything you write
i love lily's like "my dude, like on one hand okay sure you sort of have a point, but on the other come the fuck on" bc yeahhh, like i can super understand feeling like somebody's using a real thing to dodge responsibility for other things that maybe are not explained by it, especially since like... yeah, my dude, there are a lot of ways to deal with this shit
goddamn though like i want to fucking know what the fuck happened because like... what, did he not stop responding to her letters?? was there sabotage?? did he just not expect her to call him on it??
idk what's going on with him but i appreciate him being put super off-balance until he explains himself, bc ofc
and like i know why he was feeling that way about her getting the first one out of the box (unless there was more than that exchange) but he still has not explained himself and sir a flashback cannot do that lifting for you
goddamnit they need to just fuck already
Hi Taylor! Finally back (after a too-long hiatus) for another review.
Oh man this is going to be super awkward I think. You did a great job writing the conversation about Benjy – you can just hear Lily mentally chanting “oh fuck oh fuck oh fuck” while trying to make everything less awkward. It was also hilarious to read, for I have now been conditioned to enjoy suffering (I suspect this will serve me well in law school).
I love love love the conversation between Mary and Lily. Also love the subtle slip of Lily being attracted to James, although it sounds like she’s kind of reluctant to admit it.
Omg. Did they kiss? Did they? Either I can’t read or you left it deliberately ambiguous. I love you but you suck.
You write the interactions between Lily and James so well. Their whole conversation has so much depth and I can just tell that everything in here is a reference to something that happened between them in the past or foreshadowing to the future and I love it.
Also I love how quickly they went from arguing to wanting to kiss.
The staircase slide idea is hilarious. Also avoiding doing work to eat junk food is such a mood.
Skipping something you begged to do sounds exactly like something you would do when you’re 8 (lol I did the same thing with dance) and I love that James’s mother still reminds him of it.
I love the ending, except for the part at the very end where I realize that you are probably going to break my heart, tear it to pieces, stomp on it, and light it on fire with a flamethrower.
I will be back at some point (and judging from the chapter title you are going to try to break all of us).
~Liv
Taylorrrrr!!! Here for our review swap!! <3 Your picspam is a delight, as always <333
Okay so i know you said ~*spice*~ isnt really until the latest chapter but this is a broomshed taylor… IF SOMETHING DOESNT HAPPEN YOU AND THESE SHITHEADS OWE ME BIG!!! Okay so broomshed and argument… look im not saying that i will riot, but i will yell at you…
HI IM YELLING AT YOU WHY DIDNT THEY HAVE HATE SEX IN THE BROOM LOCKER HELLO?!?!??!?!??!?!??!? AHHHHHHH!!!! ALSO FUCK JAMES ENTIRELY
I so love your wolfstar, it always makes so much sense, and i love them in this so much!!
Oh she definitely just pulled one of james’s jerseys out of that box didnt she? I love this so much!! EXCEPT THAT WASNT AS FUN AS I HOPED IT WAS, THAT WAS SAD AS SHIT WHAT THE HELL TAYLOR???
UGH AND THIS FLASHBACK IS SO CUTE???? AHHHHHHH JUST KNOWING HOW SWEET THEY WERE AND THEN KNOWING HOW BAD THEIR RELATIONSHIP IS NOW AND I HATE IT SO THANK YOU FOR THAT
HES STAYING OVER EASTER???? AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME?!?!?!?!
OH MY GOD AND AHHHHHHHHHHH SHE DID GET THE FIRST ONE OUT OF THE BOX AND I WANT TO CRY?!?!?!?
THERAPY!!! YOU CONTINUE TO OWE ME THERAPY!!!!!!!
ANYWAYS THANK YOU FOR THE SWAP EVEN THOUGH IT HURT LIKE HELL GOD BITCH (affectionate) WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME????????
Lo <3
Hey, Taylor! Here with a little review for the arctic adventure! Happy holidays, dear! :D
Oh... I think I read one of the prequel one-shots to this... and now I'm sad because he disappeared from her life and she's so angry at him... but destiny (or you :P) is bringing them back together, and I'm sure you'll fix whatever went wrong between them, am I right? ;) But it's going to take time and it's going to be agonizing, isn't it? In any case, I'm glad James is going to play for Puddlemere, even if Lily isn't at all happy about it... yet... :P
Btw, I would've never imagined Lily being a Quidditch coach? That's a very original take for sure... but after all, why not? She's fierce and strong enough for that, and a bit of a perfectionist, which I guess doesn't really hurt, right? :P And yay for no dress code! That's a plus for sure! :P
The flashback scene... aww... that was so lovely! James Potter's enthusiasm really has no equal, right? I mean, it makes sense that he would react like that, since that had always been his dream and he'd put so much effort into it, but also... his reaction was just very much in character for him (not that I'm surprised, you know their characters so, so well...) And of course it would feel contagious to Lily, and aww... she's so smitten with him, isn't she? :P But the disappointment she felt when she thought they were going to kiss, but he got distracted because he had to tell everyone... :( and it's even more sad because it's sort of foreshadowing of how their relationship is going to be (or not to be) after Hogwarts... :(
Great first chapter! Wonderful job as always! <3
Happy holidays once again and huge snowball hug,
Chiara
Hi Taylor! Returning to this story as a way to spread some holiday cheer to you! <3
I think I've mentioned this before, but I like how you give Lily an edge. And with all the complicated transfigurations she undergoes to become this Pureblood Socialite (Calypso Selwyn is a great name, by the way), she almost becomes a different person. I mean, she has to right? It's part of her being undercover here. But I just thought it was interesting because your Lily Evans, always has a sort of edge, in a different way to this alter ego of hers, and here she is again, edging it up, but in a different sort of way. I'm not sure if that makes sense, forgive me if not, it's early on my side of the world.
I really like the way you describe Calypso Selwyn's cover story. I don't think we see enough representation of people falling into one camp or another (whether it's DE or The Order), but having major doubts about their original "sides," ideals. And I think that's pretty realistic given all things political. People change sides all the time than what they were raised to believe. They doubt the party or group they're pledging their support to. And so even though Azibar Selwyn is just a passing mention here, I think his presence says a lot about "average people," in the course of war.
I love the inclusion of Lily playing football during her primary school days and Quidditch sort of taking place of that whenever she went off to Hogwarts.
And xD Lily hardcore checking out James and still feeling all the feelings. It was amusing how disgruntled she was about it. And then him straight up coughing and almost dying over his water when she takes her shirt off. xD These fools have me cackling.
And I love the smoke pellet scene so much! It felt so fun and vibrant and full of charged activity and it was perfect, ok? And then Lily coming to realize the complexity of James' eye color and how the smoke pellet took on those three colours gave me all the "awwwey," feels. <3 Anyway, I'm sure you'll be breaking my heart soon. But I'm sure I'll read on to experience it anyway. ;)
Such an enjoyable chapter here, Taylor!
<3 Courtney
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