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Call me Deeds! I write the occasional HP fic. Most (all) of my stories all ridiculous. Need a laugh? You've come to the right place.
New for 2018:
On The Brink - WIP; novel
Weasley - WIP; short story
Dancing With the Death Eaters - one-shot
Those Curious Gryffindor Boys - one-shot
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Written for Infinetly Jesting's Write What You Love Challenge
When Scorpius Malfoy stumbles across a muggle t.v. during an outing in London, the course of his life is forever changed.
Hello chef! Kaitlin, I love this story already! Can we please laugh at Astoria for a moment? The way she acts here. What a ludicrious idea, Astoria Malfoy cooking? Ha! Over her dead body I'm sure. Like my mother I doubt Astoria could ever boil water let alone chop an onion correctly. If she and Draco were stuck on a deserted island, no wands, I wonder what they would do to survive? They'd have to resort to cannabalism.
In all seriousness though I really enjoyed this! I don't know if this was on purpose but I got this really fast paced vibe from the story. Like I felt that eagerness to go shopping. You know what I mean? Here and there they are, rushing to the store, side stepping others, waiting on line. Shopping for a purpose is exciting to me. I think it's because I've worked in retail so many years I like customers to know what they want.
Can we also laugh at Astoria in the muggle world looking for a computer?
Abraxas Malfoy must be rolling around in anger in his grave.
Can we also imagine Draco on his computer and surfing the web? I need to know what his computer is being used for and his brower history--stat.
Scorpius was the true gem in this story. I could practically feel the excitement rolling off of him. How magical! A tv! How interesting it would be to be a chef! I see Scorpius as Amy Adams in the movie about Julia Childs!! Yes!!! Learning to chop up some vegetables, learning about all of the muggle contraptions out there and for some reason running away from a lobster. I love to cook so I can't wait to see his progress and if he really sticks with wanting to become a chef! The first in Malfoy family history!
Author's Response:Thank you so much for this absolutely beautiful review. I hope you know how much I appreciate your words of encouragement! They seriously make me smile every time. ~Kaitlin
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The Battle of Hogwarts is beginning, and staying alive is a miracle for both Audrey and Percy. Whether it's for better or for worse has yet to be decided.
For SilverMoonFairy's Amnesia Experiment | Also written for Crimson Quill's Strong Female Challenge
I love Percy! No one ever writes about him. I love Percy with Oliver though but I will take a Percy and Audrey fic since I do sort of have one of my own. Any Percy is fine by me! :D
I think this is a neat introduction to a story. An amnesia fic during the battle? That's surprising and completely concerning! Will they just not remember each other or will Percy also forget the heartbreak of losing his brother and everything else (and everyone) around him? If that's the case how do you even come back from that? There would be so many questions and there would be so much to be explained. Plus, what if they don't fall in love again? Or at least what if she doesn't fall for him again? It isn't a guarantee! They could be completely turned off from each other. I don't know there are so many what-ifs, a major reason why I can't read time travel fics, I get lost in the what-ifs and the what-coud-be's.
You did a neat job here though introducing Audrey. She sounds like a total badass. She's willing to run head straight into the war and back someone that could have potentially chosen the wrong side. But I suppose I like her already because she realized (through careful watching) that Percy was a good man. He was just confused. I'm happy she didn't give up on him but sad because I don't know what's going to happen next.
Author's Response:Deeds! Hello! :D
Sadly, I can't say the same thing as you because I don't love Percy. I respect him, because I know he became a much better person after realising his mistakes, and I suppose this fic was sort of my redemption for him? In a weird way? But I agree that there aren't enough fics of him (Percy/Oliver is becoming really popular, I swear) :)
Uh...so all your questions are answered in the next chapter, but I'll explain anyway! :D I imagined that Audrey was the only person who was wiped from his memory because the Death Eater was trying to mess with her emotions/life. Because if you're a Death Eater, won't it get a bit boring if you just keep on using the same three Unforgivables all the time? ;) Even if it's one person, there's still a lot of explaining, though, because Audrey was such a big part of Percy's life.
Aw, I'm so glad you liked Audrey...she is pretty badass-y, and I like to think she's very perceptive too, because she could see the good in Percy even when no one else could. Okay, I think I've been rambling for too long so I'll just say thanks for such a lovely review :D
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"You're a muggle, aren't you?" he asks.
You don't know what a muggle is. From his tone, you can tell it's not a good thing if you are one.
"I- I don't know." You have to force the words out of your mouth. "I don't know what a Muggle is."
"You must be one, then," the masked man says. "Follow me, and I'll show you."
For DossyVilja's Wizards Around The World Challenge
Your brain screams at you to run, because somehow you know this is someone who shouldn't be messed with, but your body is frozen.
RUN! For heavens sake, run! My jumped in my chest when I read the above sentence. This is like one of those horror movies you watch where the girl is out walking by herself and then someone pops out of nowhere. Heck, this is like real life and it totally freaks me out because I know too many people that have been robbed. One minute they're strolling down the street and the next minute they turn a corner and a guy has a gun to their head. Thankfully they've all made it out alive but I'm seriously afraid to go walking around certain places at night. Man, this story is going to give me nightmares.
Your heart stops dead as your hear the man whisper "That was just the beginning."
My skin is crawling. This is seriously my worst nightmare.
But with that aside this story was very cool! It was extremely graphic and unnerving but once Cho was there I felt like I could breathe a little better. She not only saved the day but she totally swept in like the badass that I think she is! More people should write about her. I think you did an incredible job writing about magic in another country and incorporating a canon character into the mix. The second person worked well because I felt like I could connect to the muggle character as a muggle myself!
Oh and I don't know if it was intentional but I felt like it was a tiny nod to Hagrid when she says, "I shouldn't have said that." Though I like how chill she was about it even though it was after all an innocent accident that didn't give too much away. I just thought that was funny and a nice touch.
Author's Response:Hello! :D
Woah, the point of this story was definitely not to give you nightmares...or maybe it was? Lol, just kidding. But omg, I hate it when they do that in horror movies. It's so damn creepy! I'd never thought of comparing this to real life but now that I think of it, it happens pretty often *sighs*
Yes, Cho came to save the day! She's definitely not my favourite person but I felt like she would be kind enough to save a Muggle in a situation like that. And I agree, people should totally write more about her, because her character isn't exactly simple and is rather dimensional, unlike some main characters in the books *cough, Harry, who is literally just your typical hero but exaggerated (no, I don't like him). The second person was a fun experiment for me, just to see how different it could make a story, but I'm glad you felt you could connect more to the OC. (Though it would be great if we WEREN'T muggles)
I was thinking of Hagrid when I wrote that! He was literally the basis for Cho's portrayal when I wrote about her explaining 'her world'. They both tried hard to not give away essential details, but still manage to let things slip. I felt like that tiny touch of fluff/humour/whatever was needed the whole story, which was (as you pointed out) very dark.
I seriously didn't mean for it to be this creepy, but I'm glad you still liked it! Thanks so much for this awesome review :D
“I'm no lunatic man! I'm a sane man fighting for his soul!” -- R.M. Renfield (Bram Stoker’s Dracula, directed by Francis Ford Coppola, 1992)
Frank Longbottom awakens to find himself on the inside looking out.
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Never has it ceased to me just how beautiful it was for my wife to instinctively know when Neville was nearby or needed something
I firmly believe that Frank and Alice knew who Neville was. This story was perfect because this is how I think they are. I think their minds are still there they were just tortured to such an extent that they've essentially retreated into themselves. The trauma was too much they can't break free from it so they're just forever stuck inside their heads. I think Neville calms them down and that's why Alice tries to give him the wrappers. They want to interact with him they just can't for all of those years and it's just incredibly sad.
I'm a big fan of how you switched from what happened to Frank and Alice to a more present time. I don't think anyone ever writes about them after it just happened. It was kind of painful because I think Augusta would have had that false sense of hope. They don't entirely know what happened to them just yet so maybe just maybe once they get to St. Mungo's they'll be themselves again. Unfortunately that isn't the case. To think the last time you could talk and function like your regular self was at the sight of Bellatrix Black. Uh. What a disgusting woman!
I think you handled Frank and his realization/disorientation quite well here too. It felt like he was just on the brink of insanity but kept being pulled back by the reality around him. A constant struggle that I truly believe in. Great job!
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Sybill Trelawney meets her destined lover.
~ Written for lovegood27's Random Pairing Challenge ~
Silly of course, because when two lovers are fated to be together, no force in the universe can stop their union.
After all of the sob stories I have been reading lately this is already brightening up my mood. I mean Professor T and Lockhart? COME ON NOW! WHY HAVEN'T I READ ANYTHING ABOUT THEM BEFORE?
I SHIP THEM AND I HAVEN'T EVEN GOTTEN TO THE REST OF THE STORY.
They are fated for each other. It makes perfect sense. Her kooky nature and his....well...actually he's kooky as well. They're both kooky. They're a kooky match made in heaven!
I could already see the wedding bells at the bottom of my teacup.
This made me giggle like a schoolgirl.
maybe he wanted to be the one to propose
Oh good heavens. A little forward, aren't we? Well, I guess when you know you know.
He would carry my curse instead. For I am a seer and my powers would ensure that by the time this year ends, his career, his future, his life… would all be over.
I might have pumped my fist in the air and said, "YOU GO GIRL!" You know I still back the above that I wrote for my review. I could see them together. Gildeory is so self-involved and Sybil is on another wavelength. It could work, couldn't it? I suppose it doesn't matter because she has cursed him and we all know what happens to him next. He really deserves it for acting like such a pompous cow. I do believe Gildeory was gay though. I think he would have liked men but he probably didn't act on it publicly because it would have tarnished his image and women were his entire brand. I wonder if he obliviated the minds of his lovers too.
This was a fantastic read though. You had perfect lines here and there for some added comedic relief. I just love the character of Sybil and to see her shine in a new light. Excellent job!
Author's Response:THANK YOU FOR READING AND REVIEWING! I CANT BELIEVE YOU SHIP THEM AFTER READING AND YOU GOT SO INVESTED IN MY LITTLE STORY. sorry for the caps but I got so excited reading your review. it's amazing to read your comments. I am really glad you liked the characterisation and the overall narrative and tone. thanks!
Through all of it, through the fear, the devastation, you held onto your hope, nurtured it lovingly like you would have the baby you longed for. * To Hannah Longbottom, happiness doesn’t come naturally.
Hannah has learned that fear or anger or resignation are not the opposite of hope, as one might assume—all of these can co-exist at the same time.
I'm going to apologize in advance because I'm not entirely sure I can read this story in its fully capacity. It has nothing to do with your writing, well partially, because I have been enjoying your stories. It is the fact that it seems you can sink into my emotions and make me feel deeply connected to the characters in all of these situations you've been writing about. Pregnancy is a difficult issue for me because I don't think I can have a child and I've tried to really come to terms with that. I've taken tests and the doctors say well, it doesn't seem like anythings wrong that we can figure out anyway so when it comes down to it well, there's always IVF. I'm at this stage in my life where everyone else is getting married and having kids and I don't think I'm going to have any of that so this story might tear me in two if I read the entire thing.
But I promise to review as much as I can and read as much of it as I can because I knew it will be worth it and a little cathartic if I can get through it.
was an unsaid “I love you“ and “I believe in us“ and “We’ll still try“.
I appreciate Neville. I do but mean seriously just do not get it. It's like we're told this thing our entire life that we were literally made to have kids. We were given a uterus and whatever else for a reason. Right? Some of us don't want to have kids (and hey I'm part of those people or at least that's what I tell people because of the above) and some of us do. But it's like you know when you can't or you have to struggle for it the 'I believe in us' and the 'well we have to try' is just so heart breaking and can really make or break you. And yeah sometimes men are the issue. It's their sperm but it still hits women ten times harder.
I don't even know how to leave this review. I'm not entirely sure what to say. I've just been sitting at my desk staring at my computer screen for the past five minutes. You managed to capture Hannah's doubts and fears quite well. They kind of mirror mine except I've not there just yet but it still didn't make this story less shocking and heartbreaking. That doubt just never leaves you. That pain is there forever. My aunt had miscarriages, twins, and she never got over it. To this day she still won't go to baby showers but everyone that hasn't gone through that experience tells her to get over it. It's been years. What's the big deal? I know other people too that went through the same thing. It's not a light subject. It's not an easy fix. I'm actually thankful that you didn't bring us with Hannah on the rest of her journey. I don't need to know what happens next. I don't want to pity her. I don't want to have false hope for her either. The mention of Alice too was chilling. Gosh, can you write a happy story next time? Please?
Author's Response:Deeds, I'm so sorry for your pain and for once I wish I hadn't made a reader cry with my story!
I mean, I'm very glad I managed to make Hope relatable and real in a way that seems relevant (from the responses I got), but I'm very sorry it hit you so hard.
It's very good to hear that the cut-off point worked for you. It felt to me like it had to be open-ended to make the story relevant - the struggle is real on its own and it isn't defined by the outcome. And I'm happy that worked for you.
I wish you all the best for your future, no matter what it brings - I know you can deal with what's in the cards for you. I wish you happiness and that you'll be able to enjoy whatever comes next for you.
Love, Jo
Their lips are touching, at first only a brush of skin against skin, soft like the flutter of eyelashes. For a moment Sirius knows they are both thinking "This is it?", "This is all?", but then it registers that this is Remus and him, him and Remus the way he has dreamt, has dreaded so many times.
And this realisation changes everything.
His breathing hitches when he finds clear brown eyes looking back at him. Remus is lying on his side, studying Sirius intently like he studies his books—with a singleminded concentration, as if Sirius were the most important thing in the world.
Wow. You really captured me in this story. I don't normally reading WolfStar (I think that's what people call it) but I thought your summary was interesting. Man! Your descriptions are wild. I wanted to kiss Remus myself.
"You didn’t tell me you wanted this…" he says and leans forward to kiss Sirius. It’s a very deliberate movement, very much like Remus himself.
Do you see what I'm talking about? I mean, woah. Remus Lupin has game.
You killed them – don’t you remember?“
I have to tell you I didn't even know you were going to go there with this story. You completely caught me by surprise. I thought this was going to be a slightly smutty one-shot the way it was going. I didn't think we'd end with Sirius in Azkaban tossing and turning over this memory. Jeez, way to put a damper on a happy story. I did really love it though. The descriptions were on point. I could feel the heat radiating off of them and then it turned into this story of creepy/horror story when Remus says, "you killed them--don't you remember.' For some reason I see him as someone out of like SAW or one of those movies where they're like 'She's been dead for fifty years!' The way he says it to Sirius made my skin crawl. Uh! My heart aches for Sirius. Why couldn't he just live a happy and long life with Remus by his side? Always pain for the two of them. Always.
Author's Response:Hello and thank you so much for your review, Deeds! (I'm probably bringing dishonor on my family and my cow by replying so late, so I'm sorry for that.)
It was a pleasure opening the archives to your excited reactions to this! I'm glad you found Remus alluring and that you read The only Day there ever was despite not shipping Wolfstar in general. And I have to admit I'm very happy I managed to make your skin crawl, heart ache and generally surprise you.
Thank you for taking the time to review!
Love, Jo
Love is looking at someone’s face and feeling like coming home—well, it is for most people.
When Neville Longbottom stands waiting in front of Florean Fortescue’s Ice Cream Parlour he can’t remember the face of the woman he is waiting for, but he thinks she might be the love of his life.
written for the "diversify canon" challenge
Wow. Normally when I review I pick out my favorite quotes and comment about why certain parts stood out to me but I was so intrigued by the story I had to keep reading. I've never heard of prosopagnosia so I wasn't sure what exactly Neville had but it didn't matter because his character just sounded so interesting I had to read on. I think you did a great job with this story. Besides learning about something new I felt like I walked in his shoes and felt his mild confusion as I read on. I appreciate how close to canon you tried to make the story as well. The mention of his grandmother, the train ride, the DA, etc. All moments and things we know about Neville that connected to him that really gave this story life. You were really able to round this story out and give a certain life to it to make it believable.
Author's Response:Deeds!
What better feedback could I wish for but "Wow."?
It's also great to read you enjoyed learning about prosopagnosia. It's something more people should know about, it might make life one hell of a lot easier for a child like Neville.
Thank you so much for your review!
Love,
Jo
Written for Diogenissa's Parent's Day Challenge
The young man speaks, but his words confuse me. He tells me that it's mother day, something that I had failed to remember. I mean why would I really? My mother is long dead and my husband and I have never been lucky enough to have a child.
WHY! WHY MUST YOU BREAK MY HEART SO EARLY IN THE MORNING? Okay, not for nothing but I don't trust you when I read your stories. Ha-ha! There's always some twist that catches me off guard so I was convinced Alice was going to drop the baby. There was something inside of me that said she's really going to go there and do this, isn't she? That would have shattered me but here I sit in a million little pieces. THIS STORY WAS SO GOOD! I mean seriously first the confusion that she felt, the wonder and then the slight yearning (I felt anyway) for a baby because she thought she never had one. OOO! oo! Ooo the part where she mentions Frank always day dreaming. My heart. My heart! It's broken! and when Alice questioned why Neville kept calling her mum. And why they named the baby after her and then when Frank and Alice moved. THE HUG. THE BLANKET. THE THANK YOU. THE WARMTH.
WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME? You didn't just give Neville hope. You gave me hope. I need more. I demand more! You're a queen!!!!!!
Author's Response:Deeds! Thank you so much for this lovely review. I'm so sorry it broke your heart, especially early in the morning. Thank you so much for this lovely review! <3 Seriously, it's one of my favorites that I've ever received.
~Kaitlin
What could Scorpius do?
He was trash for a good closet make out session.
and if Albus was on fire and Scorpius had a glass of water he was sure that he would only drink half of it, and then use the rest to put the flames out.
GEE SCORPIUS, ONLY HALF? Come on man! Slytherin through and through.
"Want to make out?"
WOAH. That was complete whiplash. I was not expecting that. I had to read it twice before it registered in my head. Albus, you are quite the saucy man. I wish I had your cojones.
(Scorpius, say yes. Cooooome on.)
"Albus, if you were my husband, I'd drink it."
THE SEXUAL TENSION IS KILLING ME.
ALSO....
LOL
"You can never have too many closet inspectors."
In all of the fanfics I have read where they have the cliche broom closet make out scene this one is by the far the best. You should get an award. If there was a challenge on the forums to write about a broom closet scene you'd get 1st place. I'm giving you your challenge winner review right now!
"You're out of touch with reality." James slammed the door shut again, leaving the two teenagers once again in darkness.
James, you can't seriously be that air headed. Come on man. Just...even Ron wouldn't have fallen for that one.
"Never! I like it in here," Albus yelled back. "It's safe, and not judgmental."
There are no words. Just...no words.
THIS WAS EPIC! I loved it. Every bit of it. The bad jokes. The puns. The...everything. You completely surprised me. I thought this story was going on a completely different direction when I first started reading it and then you spun it in an entirely new direction. I just loved the twist you gave to an otherwise regular story. Great job really.
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"Sirius, you are the light within my darkness. I'll fly with you tonight,"
For Kayla.
I want us to have adventures on this motorbike. It's a smoother ride and you'll be safe
Forget Remus, I was totally touched by this gesture! I mean for one it fits so well into their world. Even if Remus and Sirius weren't in love but just friends I could see them cruising around in the air going from place to place (before the war gets really dark, maybe before Lily and James wed) as a mini holiday to let loose and enjoy themselves. I find it extremely believable Sirius would want to do something nice like that for Remus because he deserves to feel a sense of normalcy, especially after Hogwarts. I think it's sweet that he tried to show Remus he was thinking about a future with him. Self doubt can really ruin a relationship and Remus has a lot of that but Sirius was able to quell it, at least for now. Uh, they're so cute it hurts! What a sweet little kiss. I like that they don't promise each other forever. Right now is good enough for them. As long as they are together.
I AM GUSHING! This was so cute!
At the end of the Second War, Harry Potter stumbles across a book that promises to be his salvation. Meanwhile, Hermione Granger is determined to be the voice of reason. Time Travel Fic. || Banner by azimuth@TDA
Or so he'd tried to explain to Hermione back in fifth year, as she bodily dragged him to the library to study for OWLs. She had remained deeply skeptical
Haha! That's hilarious. I could see Harry trying to reason with Hermione and this would be his main argument. Well Hermione, what if the books are evil? She'd look at him and say something snarky I'm sure.
And Harry being Harry, did an extra stupid thing
I think the above defines Harry perfectly. Harry being Harry did a stupid thing he left went into the forbidden forest, he couldn't help himself and trudged along to the girls' bathroom, etc, etc. It's pretty much what the books are based on. Harry just being Harry.
He could- Harry felt lightheaded- he could have Sirius back.
Harry, why can't you ever just leave well enough alone? I know you're hurting but time travel? Because that's going to go well Potter.
Who even keeps books in the pantry
You know I didn't even question that. Logically I should but them blacks be crazy.
I love this! I'm already hooked with just chapter one. I've missed your writing so much. I remember reading broccoli and a few other stories many years ago. You have just hit the mark here with humor. It wasn't too much that I felt like I could still believe Harry would do something so stupid. Let's face it he likes to get into trouble and trouble likes to follow him. I like the addition of Hermione here too. She's the only one that's thinking logically but I think she knows even with her research Harry can never leave well enough alone. I wonder what kind of world he's going to get stuck in.
Author's Response:Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D I had a lot of fun writing this story too--humour is one of my favourite things to write, so I'm glad it didn't fall flat! <33
As the youngest Director of the Muggle Liaison Office ever to be appointed, Scorpius Malfoy doesn't have time to date. Scorpius hardly has time to drink his morning coffee before he's hearing a new sob story concerning Muggles.
His newest client has a lot of stories.
-or-
Four times Hugo Weasley needed help from the Director of the Muggle Liaison Office, and one time he didn't.
She was sobbing and the dog was in so much pain, I used a quick Episkey and fixed its leg. You know, you’d think she’d be more grateful, but no, she—”
I’m sorry I know it’s awful but I find this quite hilarious. I honestly am not sure I even believe Hugo at this point and we’re only at round two. Does he have the worst taste in women or does he just think Scorpius with his coffee cup is cute? I hope it’s the latter because then I’d just feel a bit awful for laughing at him.
A bit.
Not 100%.
“There are… other Grindylows in the lake?” Scorpius tried.
Head meet desk. Scorpius for the love of—
“—and he was crying and I was crying and the dreidel was on fire—”
COME ON NOW!
YOU DIDN’T JUST!
A DREIDEL!
HUGO, WHY!
OH MY GOD I LOVED THIS! IT WAS SO CUTE AND FLUFFY BUT NOT OVER THE TOP FLUFFY BUT AT THE SAME TIME OVER THE TOP FLUFFY. I’M FANGIRLING OVER YOU RIGHT NOW! GOSH, HUGO SOUNDED SO DREAMY!
SCORPIUS AND THAT LIST I MEAN COME ON NOW!
You go Scorpius! You get that man! I can’t believe the entire story began and ended with coffee. It was just genius. Pure genius. WHAT GOES ON IN YOUR HEAD?
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You'd think that adrenaline-fueled Gryffindor girls who fight monsters and even-tempered manipulative Slytherin boys training to be Healers would not mix well. You might be right.
(this is undergoing a facelift - making the writing a bit tighter and also making it shenanigans-compliant.)
The wizarding world had focused too much of their energy on dark wizards following the Second Wizarding War, and they’d forgotten there were other dark things out there. Now they were paying the price.
For me this is entirely believable. In all honesty I do think after the war ended and everything was pretty much sorted out they had a period where the WW flourished. A sort of golden age if you will. Where everything would be peachy keen and Death Eaters were a thing of the past. I do think Harry and the others would be wary but some of the guard would be let down. I just don’t seem them taking magical creatures that seriously. Maybe because some of them did fight with them (or against) during the war, if only to protect their land, but still. I do think they would be a problem later on though because there’s always a sort of ‘evil’ lurking out there.
I can’t believe she thinks Lav. Brown is intimidating and scary. That’s actually pretty funny. How things can change! See, people can change! In both good and bad ways. I understand her misgivings and uneasiness about meeting Narcissa but she just needs to bite the bullet and let it go. Rose makes these little comments about the Malfoy bloodline so it’s obvious she loves Scorpius and sees herself spending years with him. She just has to do this one thing in order to seal the deal. I know it sounds awful but sometimes all it takes is that one push of effort and everything aligns perfectly. I’m not saying they need to get engaged or married tomorrow but this will bring them closer and hopefully quell the fighting.
Author's Response:Yesssss I am so glad that this premise rang true to you! I feel like a lot of the next big evil next gen stories are really all about dark wizards, and while I love a lot of stories centered around that, don't get me wrong, I wanted to do something a little different.
I agree re: Narcissa. The fact that Narcissa openly supported mass murder (arguably to the point of genocide) is definitely reason for hesitation, but I think it's pretty clear that Narcissa might have changed significantly, particularly given how she helped Harry. To me, Narcissa is a quintessential Slytherin primary (sortinghatchats - IDK if you're familiar with it, but it's the best sorting system ever) - she's all about her personal loyalties, and everything else is just details. That doesn't make her a particularly good person in the grand scheme of things, but it does mean that she's not an idealogue the way other supporters of Voldemort were (IMO).
Thank you so, so much!
Did she tell you to do something different? Because you should, you know.”
See it’s moments like this that I find Rose to be unappealing. If it was the other way around and Scorpius was telling her what to do she would be livid. I mean they’re both spoiled but she’s really such a brat. It’s lines like that that really let it shine.
There’s not one right job for most people - there are just jobs people do for a lot of different reasons that hopefully don’t make them miserable.
I wish Draco was my dad. Or my mom or anyone with authority that I would listen to in my family because he is a sensible man. I am really happy with the way you portray him as a father here. I like that there’s a sense of warmth here but he still seems to carry an edge and restraint within him. He is rather flexible, isn’t he, though? Hm. I love Draco.
Sorry I got distracted by my love for him. There are cartoon hearts floating around my head.
I’m happy to see Scorpius lean on his father for support. It’s great that he has Albus and a friend in James but they don’t really get it, you know? Albus might feel uncomfortable by his grandparents but he doesn’t know the real relationship that Scorpius has with them first hand. He also doesn’t know what goes behind closed doors 100%. No one does besides Scorpius. I’m sure he tells Albus and Rose everything but it’s not the same as living through it. That’s how it was for Draco too. It’s not like Scorpius had a hard life or anything but I’m saying he has a more intimate relationship with the Malfoy family seeing as he’s the son/grandson. I was thrilled by the fact that Draco didn’t tell him what to do but instead he kind of gave him that over all advice of ‘do what makes you happy.’ Screw Rose, if he wants to focus on magical creatures because it’ll make him feel better why not? She wouldn’t stop her life and dreams for him. She’s not flexible. Draco is completely and utterly right.
Wow. I never thought I would type those words.
Author's Response:I'm so glad you like Draco! Yes, he's definitely very flexible; I think that a lot of characters in the series will break before they bend, but Draco will definitely bend before he breaks. He's a lot more level-headed in that way than many of the Gryffindors in series, who can tend to get caught up in the principle of the thing to such an extent that they forget practicality.
I'm also glad (in a slightly weird way, maybe??) that Rose is coming across as unreasonable here. I do think that she has a point, especially regarding Lucius, but I feel like she articulates it pretty poorly and in a way that's always going to leave Scorpius feeling a little confused and attacked. There aren't any easy answers, and ultimately, I think it kind of comes down to "you have to do you." I think that came across?? If so, I'm really happy that it did. :) :)
Thank you!
I do think that things go your way a lot more than they go his, because he’s just a lot more easygoing than you.
That was my point entirely and here I thought I was being the unreasonable one. They’re in a mature adult relationship. She just has to suck it up and do this for him. The War was a long time ago. I get that they did horrible things but there has to be some give. At least show you can be the bigger person and show up. I’m not talking about letting it slide and being okay with the fact that Lucius was knee deep into the torture, murder, etc. I don’t expect her to be pals with them but it wouldn’t kill her to give them a chance.
Rose, if you do it just because you think you owe him, you’re just going to end up resenting him for it, even though he didn’t actually make you do anything.”
Uh. Lucy I hear you. I do. I understand the resenting thing. I hated when my boyfriend would want me to come to every damn family event. Why do I have to? It kind of festered inside of me for awhile but it was because I was very much like Rose. I was stubborn and I took more than I gave. Once I started to give in a little bit more and the playing field became even I realized it was okay. Now I miss his family but that’s not important. The point is she’s afraid. That’s what it is. I understand that. I really do. She doesn’t want to be offended and she herself doesn’t want to be offensive. I think anyway. Rose isn’t used to doing things she doesn’t want to or doesn’t have to do. Well, your understanding and agreeable boyfriend who loves you could resent you for this. I know she’s going to meet Narcissa and it’ll be fine, maybe a little bit awkward, but it’s like come on girl. What if they got married? Would she not interact with his family at all because she simply doesn’t want to?
Scorpius, no offense - well, a little offense, I guess - but your grandfather was kind of a death eater. A real one, not a baby one like your dad.”
I like that there are apparently levels to being a Death Eater.
Baby Death Eater
Real Death Eater
Is there no in-between?
“This matters to you, and I think your grandmother probably will behave herself.”
I think it’s a good thing he asked Rose. They’re still his family, right? I mean if Scorpius didn’t care about his grandparents it wouldn’t be an issue but he does. If he didn’t care he wouldn’t have asked her so yeah they might have their faults but they still mean something to him. He knows it might not go down well but he has to believe that both sides love him enough to try. Trying means something. Maybe Lucius will be a cow to Rose but I doubt Narcissa will be. If anything she would be nice to Rose I think because she has ties to Harry Potter. If it wasn’t for Harry she wouldn’t have been able to have a life, watch her son marry or have Scorpius as a grandson.
I’m not surprised Scorpius is unsure which field to choose to work in. If I was in his position Rose and the rest of his family/friends would be my concern too. What if something happens and they can’t get to St. Mungo’s or there’s an emergency and Scorpius is the one that is there or the one that they ring? He would want to know how to deal with any of the situations to keep them all alive. Though I’m sure he’s concerned about the general population as well. It is a lot so I could feel his stress as I read through the entire chapter. He has a lot to consider. I just hope he makes the best choice for him.
Even when she was just sitting alone by the window in her grandparents’ living room, watching Fred bewitch snowballs to pelt Molly in the back of the head no matter what direction she was looking in, there was a sense of togetherness that she could never seem to find anywhere else.
You’ve hit the Burrow on the head to a ‘T.’ It just sounds so cozy and homey I would love to spend every weekend there as well. Not with my family but with hers because mine drives me crazy.
it was her experience that when you avoided problems for long enough, they just went away.
And that is not how relationships work. Healthy ones anyway. I reckon there is a storm brewing here because if she does get injured Scorpius is going to have a field day over it. It’s like some people can’t date cops or firefighters or people in the army. Right? Because it’s so difficult. You spend so much of your time worrying if they’re alive or if they’re going to make it through the day. I’m sure she’s somewhat worried about her safety but Scorpius would be even moreso because his job is to heal people and watch them in pain when they can’t be healed or die. Imagine he’s working one day and Rose is levitated in or something and he can’t do anything about it. It just makes the relationship harder because she won’t talk about it. Three years my butt. Yeah, I said it. I could see them breaking up. I don’t think you’d do that but I wouldn’t be against it.
I know Rose is used to getting her way but girl come on. I understand his grandparents, well grandfather, does not have a redeeming qualities but a relationship is about give and take. All she does is take and she doesn’t give much back. Cut Scorpius some slack.
UH. I’m sorry. I think I’m hungry. I’m feeling particularly mean towards Rose right now. HAHA.
Scorpius is faced with a dilemma - follow his heart and pursue Albus or follow his father's wishes and have a family? Will Albus tolerate being set aside while Scorpius dates his cousin Rose? Most importantly, will anyone leave this story without their heart being broken?
“Do you know if Rose is single?” It was supposed to be a casual question, something not to be read into
Okay so here’s the thing. There’s a part of me that wants to smack Scorpius for listening to his parents but then there’s a part of me that feels like Scorpius should see what else is out there. Hear me out, I believe he loves Albus. I believe they would be great together if given the chance to actually be together. Scorpius just seems so unsure that he should explore other options. Rose might not be the love of his life but she could help him answer some personal questions about himself I’m sure he has.
Harry wished he could confer with Hermione before continuing the conversation but Al’s emotions couldn’t wait on his aunt’s advice
Oh Harry! I adore you, you beautiful man.
I knew his parents weren’t going to reject him. I love Dad Harry but besides my heart soaring over him my heart fell for Albus. It’s not a good feeling when the person you love loves someone else or doesn’t love you anymore. I’ve been in both situations and it’s really gut wrenching to see them fooling around with someone else. I’m surprised Scorpius could be so cold to his friend. He could have chosen any girl but he had to choose his cousin. I mean really come on that is just a sign of ulterior motives. He really thought he could have Albus on the side as his lover and Rose as his wife. Scorpius and Rose might get along well but he doesn’t love her. He’s not in love with her and he probably won’t fall in love with her. Not with the way he was describing her. He wants real love damnit. He needs it.
Author's Response:I agree with you about it being good for Scorpius to try things out. I do think he has genuine feelings and attraction to Rose even if things go like they go.
Writing Dad!Harry made me so warm and fuzzy inside. Cursed Child harry killed me because he was such a blah father.
Scorpius is a bit cold and hard to sympathize with in this part of the story. He's being very callous towards Al but I feel part of that is self presevation. Albus doesn't spend the entire story down in the dumps though -- I promise!
Thank you for a wonderful review!
-Rose
When not in this room they were friends but behind the silky green hanging on their bed, they were lovers.
Your description. Your way with words. Mindblowing as always. UH! I’m already fully invested in this story and you’ve only posted two chapters so far. Heck, I’m fully invested in this story and I haven’t even gotten past the entire first portion just yet. I live for Albus and Scorpius. I don’t know why but they just fit in my head. Even when they aren’t in love with each other in other stories I feel like they have this bond that is unbreakable. Here even moreso!
"I want to marry someone I love."
I’m in agnony. I don’t want to read on. I can’t read on. Scorpius why wouldn’t you want to marry someone you love? I want to too! (If only.) His parents sound awful. I’m sorry I do love Draco on a regular basis but I do think he’s still a pretty awful character. Here anyway it doesn’t sound like he’s going to have any redeeming qualities. Accept your son for who he is. That’s what Draco needed when he was younger. He needed love. Someone to comfort him. Someone to tell him it was okay when he made a mistake. Have that courtesy and do better for your son.
I was so enthralled by the story I forgot I was supposed to be writing a review. Just the interaction between Albus and Scorpius alone. Ah! The heat! The passion! Well, as much passion at their age that is. It’s so thrilling! I don’t think Harry would approve of their relationship either but I think he would accept it better than Draco. As long as his son is happy I think that’s what he would care about. I was surprised with Astoria. I guess she was little bit more understanding especially since she clearly wasn’t in love with Draco when they got together but you would think with that in mind she’d be okay with a gay son. Who cares about the pureblood line and name? It seems so antiquated for the story but the Wizarding World…I don’t know. I go back and forth with it because I feel like they would still be stuck in the old way of thinking even though it’s a new age. You know what I mean? So it’s entirely plausible that Draco and Astoria would think and act the way that they do but then it’s also very sad after everything they have all been through.
Author's Response:I've posted the rest of the story and I'll get on with the sequel soon. :D You motivated me to finish posting it. I'm so glad the description at the beginning got you going.
Alright, so, I don't have a great defense for Draco. He's backwards with the way he thinks and does eventually (like, several stories and a one shot away) redeem himself as a father. Both Draco and Astoria are okay with the fact that Scorpius is gay. They see him having a hetero relationship to be the practical choice and are basing their bias on that more than approval of him/who he loves. I'm not sure if they'd care if he had kids with a pureblood as much as it's important that he keep the name Malfoy going.
Thank you so much for a lovely review and I hope Draco's attitude doesn't put you off the story too much
In this issue, Millie and Sirius are back with another adventure! The task was simple: brew a potion that can turn people into man-bats - what could possibly go wrong?
An outtake from Like a House on Fire | Can be read alone
2nd Place in LooneyLizzie's Name that Fandom! Challenge @HPFF
Written for International Batman Day 2015
Banner by victus. @tda
until they both worked up the guts to bring up the change in the status quo, he’d refer to Millie White as his Valentine
I needed a change of pace and to read something happier off of your page. I haven’t read your story but I’m glad this can be seen as a stand-alone piece. I know nothing about their relationship but I already like the characters. They seem relatable and funny. Granted I love Sirius so that might be why but Millie seems like a neat character too. She sounds a little sassy but isn’t over the top and in your face.
As usual, he ignored Millie’s suggestion and continued to stroke his imaginary beard in thought.
I don’t know why but that came off super raunchy to me. Ha-ha.
“All warm and modest.”
I know. I know. I’m a child but…
HAHAHA
HE’S NAKED.
(Sorry)
Wow! I’ve never read a Batman fic before. This was super cool! At first I wasn’t sure where you were going with this only because it’s never been added to a fic before. I was pleasantly surprised! I think this was entertaining from beginning to end. You were able to wrap up the entire theme and leave me wanting a little bit more. I would love to read more about Sirius and Millie. It seems like they would be a good couple. Also, oh, before I forget, I liked that you kept up with the ‘Valentine’ thing until the end. It made me chuckle and Sirius can commit (in my mind) so I like that he committed to referring to her as his Valentine (in his head anyway).
Author's Response:I'm very, very pleased that you like the characters. Remember Me Not is one of my uncommonly sad stories. I usually write stuff more in the vein of this story. I really wanted this one-shot to stand alone, despite it being part of a larger whole. It's just supposed to be a window into one of the zany, but still everyday, adventures that people probably had at Hogwarts before Harry Potter crashed into their lives. And of course, I rely heavily on the universal love for Sirius Black :P
Imaginary beards, raunchy? To each their own I suppose :P
Haha, he is naked! Probably the reaction Sirius was trying to avoid.
I've also never read a Batman fic before - nor written one. It was so much fun to write! Thanks so much for the lovely review :)
Fred says goodbye to his family
And asks them to remember
Written for TidalDragon's The Knockout Challenge @HPFF
Banner by Enigma @tda
Remember me as the one who stopped you from meeting a girl that night. Remember me not as dead.
Oh my…I do not like you right now. I knew this was going to be a tearjerker when I clicked on it but still this line got me and I’m already crying. Why would you do this to me?
Remember me as the one who forgot to answer your letters but never forgot your stories
After all that time and the unanswered letters he wrote to him? Seriously? Why are you trying to crush my heart.
I can’t even read the part about George. I’m sorry. I had to skip it.
My left buttock does.
Thank you for finally making me laugh. All of the paragraphs have been bittersweet but this helped swallow all of them down a bit more.
Oh my god I can’t even come up with appropriate words. I can barely see through the tears in my eyes. Combine that with my allergies and I am a sight for sore eyes I can tell you that much. This was beautiful. Seriously, truly beautiful. My godmother passed away a few months ago and I have been in this fog the entire time. I haven’t fully accepted it so I try to think of her as not really being gone. When I’m in a store or see a tattoo of Betty Boop I remember how much she loved the character and the entire collection I got her. Or when I see some pearls or watch certain TV shows. I remember her in the tiniest things but I can’t even imagine what she would say to me. Oh wow. This story really hit me. Wow. It was just really really good.
Author's Response:Oh, gosh! I'm not sure how I feel about this! I'm sorry for bringing such emotions up for you, and I hope that you're doing better now. I cannot begin to fathom the depth of your loss, but I am deeply sorry to hear that. I'm pleased that you enjoyed the little touch of humour. Fred is trying to keep things as light as possible, and trying to get his family to remember all the good times, rather than dwell in the bad. Also, allergies are the worst! I completely empathise. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Having him treat me like an equal - like someone who knows things - always made me feel like I was doing something right.
After reading the story about why exactly Astoria feels the way she does about her brother I think this gave me a little bit of closure because I wanted more before. I still do want more so I’m going to have to search for the rest of your stories concerning Astoria. I think the change in her is pretty neat. On the surface she seems like she’s so much happier (and inside too). Just the way she interacts with her brother, the fact that her interest is finally piqued on something (even if it is Draco Malfoy) and the small concern for her niece Jo.
Love reading about a tiny Jo!
“Do he really get death threats?”
Small typo here!
Again, I would have loved a little more. I know you like to give us small snapshots so I’ll have to find out all about their interaction in your other story but I kind of wish that everything was packed into one. I like to know everything at once. The suspense is always killing me!
I think it was good that Astoria seemed interested in Draco. She seems keen to know information about him but still wary, which makes the slow burn between them believable. I just wouldn’t want either of them to jump into something because they are both damaged goods. They need to take care of themselves before they can be involved with each other. I know that’s where it’s going to end up but I like the pace you have so far. There’s no sense in rushing a good thing, right?
She even canceled dates because she just couldn't be bothered to go.
Oh Dom.
(Shakes head)
You’re such a beautiful soul. I think people give her too much flack in your stories because to me she sounds like a wonderful person. So what she’s not the most romantic person in the world? Really, is it necessary? Sometimes dating can be draining even if you are head over heels in love. It shouldn’t be your number one priority. You are always your number one priority because if you’re not happy you can’t make another person happy. She works on her happiness. It works. I say keep it up Dom!
But there was something about Dominique’s body language and the hour and Merlin knew what else that was giving her a very strong conviction that Something Else was going on.
Well that explains it. Dominique sounds like the type of girl that would never take a relationship too seriously unless she’s 100% sure that the person she’s with is the one. I know the elusive one makes everyone cringe and it sounds so corny but if you don’t really care about the relationship and all of the after effects then the person wasn’t really for you. Right? So all those hearts that she broke they weren’t for her and the other girls or boys need to realize that. Charlotte sounds decent enough but she seems to be clinging on to something that was never quite there. I’m sure they had their fun and in retrospect no one enjoys being dumped. Dominique gives off this air that she doesn’t care but in the back of her mind I’m sure there’s a little voice in her head that questions her decisions and her feelings. I can’t pity Charlotte because she was warned. She knew what she was getting herself into so she shouldn’t be so heartbroken. It comes off a little pathetic in my opinion. I know that sounds harsh but it does. And I’m a Charlotte, okay? I’m a stage five clinger so I get it. I do but I’m trying to be better about it.
And Dad, I'd much rather stay with him and meet you at Gran's tomorrow. I'm of age. I don't understand why this is such a problem, you've never been bothered when I was out with Fred and Micah and Lexy."
Ah yes, because sleeping over with your cousin and your friends is entirely the same thing. I can’t believe how saucy and headstrong she is. I wish I had that same kind of confidence when I was her age. My relationships would have gone a lot smoother!
He'd meant to wait for her to finish school, but she'd made it clear over the summer that she was quite done with his patience, thank you very much
You know when people ask you who wears the pants in the relationship? It’s kind of vulgar to say but in this scenario it would be Vic. She is a woman in charge and who can take charge. Teddy sounds like one of those guys who is so nice that he wouldn’t actually get the girl in the end (even though obviously he does here). But you know what I mean? The guy that gets stuck in the friend zone because he doesn’t want to ruin things and he wants to be respectful but then it becomes his downfall. That would’ve been him if she didn’t like him back. He wouldn’t have moped about it but it would’ve broken his heart just a teeny tiny bit.
You couldn't have waited until she was done with school?"
I’m cringing for Teddy. How awkward! Though I appreciate the open conversation and honesty they can have. Teddy isn’t a run of the mill guy. He is after all part of the family even though he isn’t blood. He knows them. He understands them and respects them. Plus, doesn’t he remind you a bit of her father? Well, you know what they say…
Would you like to have me again tonight?"
Oh good heavens. She really knows how to make me blush. Vic, you minx, you. I love the sexual tension even though there really shouldn’t be because they are together. It just…ooo! I love it so much. I adore sensible Teddy! He warms my heart. He has quite the woman there. He better hold onto her. She's worth every awkward conversation with her father.
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