Name: ShazaLupin (Signed) · Date: 11 Jul 2020 02:59 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey!  

Why does that first paragraph seem oh so familiar :P 

I was reading this and I was more and more convinced she was having a dream, but I guess not! This was hilarious to read, and I love how while some questions were answered during the fic, it almost created even more. 

Emma seems so dramatic, and probably a lot of funt o hang around with. It was quite a nice change that instead of moping around and feeling miserable for herself she decided to take what would have probably been a scandal/ big drama (because with that many Weasley members, drama is bound to happen) into an even bigger one so that it’s on her own terms. 

This was a really fun fic to read, and Emma seems like a really interesting and exciting character, I’ll have to check out the other fic with her in it! 

-Shaza 

 

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Name: ReillyJade (Signed) · Date: 19 Mar 2019 08:58 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi there! I'm stopping by for BvB!

 

You may call it a trainwreck of a fic, but I call it an absolute delight to read! Yes, it was a bit silly, of course, but that was the fun of it! There was just something about the whimsical writing in this piece that made me deeply enjoy the absurdity of Emma's actions. Though her devotion to creating the ultimate scandal was, admittedly, odd, there was just so something amusing and funny about it. And that's saying something, considering the reason for her scandal is hardly amusing or funny; pregnancy is definitely no joke! I guess what I'm trying to say is you took a very serious, heavy topic and spun it into a quirky, offbeat tale that I immensely enjoyed.

 

There's something distinctly teenager-ish about this. The thirst for drama, the elaborate plans, the whole not-fully-considering-the-consequences thing... I don't know, it just felt very real in that regard. (And I definitely don't mean this in a bad way!) The impulsitivity of both Emma and eventually Albus just felt so genuine. 

 

I think my favorite thing about this was how it ended. Here are Albus and Emma, running off into the not-quite-sunset after making a grand plan to run away together and announcing it to the entire school. It's a fairy-tale ending on paper, but I love that you don't show what happens after that. Do they get pulled back to school by a staff member? Do they succeed in getting away from Hogwarts but run into trouble, like running out of money? I mean, the odds that they actually get to live on their tropical island all alone are obviously very slim, but I like that you didn't delve into that. In a away, you let Emma and Albus live their dream, even if only for a little while.

 

This was far from a trainwreck, love! I enjoyed every word!

 

Cheers,

Reilly

Author's Response:

Asfhfsk you’re too nice, I don’t even know what to say, but I’m so glad you liked it :)

Lol, I guess I really wasn’t going for relatability when I created Emma’s character...although as someone who has had her fair share of attention seeking, I can appreciate her sentiments (not that I’m exposing myself or anything, you know) You’re definitely right about pregnancy (especially in teens) being a difficult topic. I think it was part of the reason why I decided to make this story humorous- I have no experience whatsoever with it, so I wasn’t sure I could pull off a dark and serious pregnancy fic. But we all need a bit of a joke sometimes ;)

Really, any of your suggestions could have happened to Albus and Emma, but who knows? It’s funny you should mention that ending, because I actually considered writing an epilogue featuring the pair raising their child together, but it seemed like too closed an ending so I left it as it is now (Personally though, I’m still rooting for their tropical island)

This was such a sweet review, thank you so much!

Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 10:56 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hi!  Here for RvG and the Magical Menagerie.

 

Oh my goodness, this was such a hilarious story!  I know you called it a trainwreck of a fic, but I loved the way that you took so many of the tropes for next gen teen pregnancy fics and threw them into this story, having the protagonist courting them rather than shying away from all the publicity.  You really played with the stereotypes of the teen pregnancy trope and you've created a really funny story.

 

The opening line was brilliant.  The chicken dance while waiting for a toilet is something I'm now going to call it.

 

I loved how Emma was rushing around and everything was so dramatic and important, but that she was actually really calculating and manipulative behind it.  Everything that happened was very deliberate and went according to her plan - I liked the way that at the start of the story I was actually feeling pretty sympathetic towards her and at the end she just seemed like a pretty awful person who was manipulating her friends for her own fame.

 

Albus's confusion about how he could be the father when they hadn't had sex, and then the way that he just decided to go along with Emma's plan to "appoint" him as the father even though it was a biological impossibility, and conform with her plan to create the biggest possible scandal xD  

 

I loved the little asides and parentheses in this which kept critiquing the story as it went along - I think my favourite one was the fact that McGonagall felt like she should have said something but who was she to stand in the way of a love story.  That made me giggle.

 

Also, the whole school of goldfish line - sneaky, and I love it!

 

This was a really fun story and I'm kind of intrigued to see how everything ends up for Emma and Albus now that they've created an appropriate scandal!

 

Sian :)

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 19 Jan 2019 04:43 AM · For: Chapter 1

 

Hey!

 

 

This was so fun! I loved what you've done with this pregnancy fic. It can difficult to do one but I think you've done a great job at making this engaging but what is so cool is how you embraced some of the next gen trope and really just went for it and made it completely outrageous but I just loved that!

 

 

The opening is great, I was laughing at the imagery that you used within the first couple of lines. It was really engaging to get me into the tone of the story.You didn't just stop with teen pregnancy but you went for mutual pining too. I thought it was a really good, I like how it was so easy to poke fun at anything but it wasn't too grumpy about it. It was really light and easy to read.

 

 

I think there were a lot of really good lines in this piece but I like 'she really fulfilled the physical requirements for a female protagonist.' DAMN. I love how snarky that is but it hurts because it's so true. I wanna run away with Albus Potter though!!  If this is a hot mess then it's my favourite hot mess! great job at getting a smile out of me first thing in the morning!

 

- Abbi xo

For: Magical Menagerie/ RvG

 

Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 18 Jan 2019 09:29 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi. This is for the Magical Menagerie.

It may be a trainwreck of a fic as you called it, but it’s a darn funny one.

First I love the title. It already decrees that this one will an interesting study of Hogwarts life.  Emma is so over the top that by the end, I really wanted to reach into the computer screen and shake her senseless, but since that’s not feasible (since I am a mere muggle), I shall have to roll my eyes and shake my head at her ridiculousness.

The narrator’s snark was awesome or maybe that was Emma’s snark, but either way, I loved the tone you set for the story.  When I got to the line of “ Perfect. Now she really fulfilled the physical requirements for a female protagonist,“ I was cracking up. By the time, Emma pulled out her to do list, I knew it was too late. This train was going full speed. The only question was would it jump the tracks or ride off into the sunset.

At the sunset it was, sort of, because this is Emma Green and the only thing you are sure about as you read the story is you have no idea where it is going, so Emma rides off, fulfilling her wish of creating a great scandal at two o’clock in the afternoon.

Author's Response:

Hi! Sorry it’s taken me awhile to get back to you :/

Emma’s pretty...interesting, let’s say. I wrote this as a parody, so I kind of thought of her as an (extremely exaggerated) embodiment of all those people in fiction/real life who love making a big drama out of everything for attention. It was not subtle, I remember writing her and thinking ‘Lol, no one would actually do this’. But yeah, I want to just give her a shake and bring her back to reality XD

I’m glad you found it funny, though! I feel like the female protagonist line is slightly untrue- ideally, a female protagonist would look flawless without even a hint of makeup on her face, right? (Not that there’s anything wrong with that, I just read it quite a lot, and it normally leads to the main female having a horde of secret admirers which OF COURSE she’s oblivious too)

Haha, I ended the story at the sunset scene because figuring out how they might try to start a new life was too complicated and I couldn’t be bothered (but in my headcanon, they move to Spain and spend every day swimming and drinking cocktails at the beach, the end)

Thanks for the review <3