Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 02 Feb 2020 09:07 PM · For: Letter, Match, Set

Hey Madi!

 

I'm here to leave you a review for the CDMC event - Round 2 - Incantations!

 

I really like that you chose to focus on Adrian Pucey as your main character. He isn't one we hear about in canon very often, so it's kind of exciting to see him fleshed out a bit more. And you do a great job of that. Right away, you give us a lot of background for him. He definitely seems like he's got something to prove and he sets about proving it. It's also interesting to see that he doesn't exactly seem to love his fellow Slytherins and the nickname they've given him.

 

It's nice to see that his hardwork pays off in getting him the captain spot in his final year. I love how focused on the game he is. There's no drama. He just wants to make the team the best that he can.

 

Aww. Here I was so excited for him to get a letter from a crush. It must feel a little bit disheartening to realize that it wasn't actually meant for him, but his teammate. It does seem a bit strange that Lillian didn't actually know the name for the person she's interested in.

 

It would figure that after he receives this letter that he'd run into both the person the letter was meant for as well as the girl who's written it. I think it's a bit funny that he's so embarrassed about the whole thing though. I mean it's easy enough to explain to his teammate that "Hey. An owl delivered this letter to me by mistake. You were the one who took the bludger last week, so I think it's meant for you."

 

Okay. Now, I'm starting to think that Lillian does actually have a crush on Pucey, not Tennent because she comes up to him while he's studying. She's also checking him out over dinner. Maybe the bit about getting struck by the bludger was a simple mistake?

 

But what is going on with Tennent here? That was a pretty aggressive confrontation over a very mild interaction. He seems a bit possessive, eh?

 

OK. She definitely is interested him and Pucey is just completely oblivious. The little mistake about the bludger has thrown him into a tailspin and he doesn't have enough confidence to think she could possibly be interested in him. I can't wait to see what happens once he figures it out.

 

Ooh. The two of them are terrible flirting back and forth and trying to outmaneuver each other. They really are the perfect match. Ha. She knew he had the letter the whole time. I wonder if she left the incorrect info in on purpose just to make him question everything. Clever, clever girl.

 

And now, as instructed by the prompt, a bit about the audio recording. I really enjoyed listening to this story as a podfic. Emma has a lovely voice and she reads very smoothly and evenly. She enunciates words well, so she's very understandable and she paces the story nicely, so it's easy to follow along.

 

Now, a request for both you and Emma. I'd love to hear and/or read more of this story....so maybe a new one-shot following up on their date?

 

Great job to you both!

 

~Kaitlin

Name: starlitcastles (Signed) · Date: 30 Dec 2019 04:07 AM · For: Letter, Match, Set

Hello there!

 

I'm here to spread some holiday cheer, well, that and to gift you a review for your wishlist since I actually have actually been meaning to read this story for quite some time as I did see it being featured the June bulletin earlier this year as well as it was read as part of Fic Night sometime in May and hadn't gotten around to reading this story until now. Anyway, with that being said, onward to the review!

 

First off, I should mention that I love how you gave characterization to both Adrian Pucey as well as Adrian Tennant, Lillian, and Lucas even if the latter hadn't been in the story for very long periods of time.  I also loved the mentions of characters like Draco and Flint to Professor Flitwick as well. I still felt that you stayed true to their characters especially with Draco and Flint. Speaking of which, I should mention that  probably very much was enjoyable to read. Also confession time: I actually did read Adrian Pucey in the books but for some reason, he never seem to stick out to me other than he was in Slytherin and part of the Quidditch team but I just haven't thought of him anymore than that which is sad considering that I actually do adore minor character in other series so I don't know why he didn't stick to me as much or I thought of him. I feel maybe it's because he personally wasn't memorable to me but that doesn't meant that he could be loved too.  I think with that in mind, I wanted to mention that I loved how you expanded him and made him your own character or at least in the sense that you made him. I feel that he comes alive with how you written him as not only somebody on the Quidditch team but a studious and fun loving boy and for the most part, a good friend to have if he's not the one being flirty.

 

I love his friendships with Lucas and Tennant as you can see the contrasts in a sense that the readers know they're both friends yet it was different as Lucas felt like somebody he bonded with over Quidditch but I also felt that he also respected him while Tennant was somebody that he could playfully joke with and how we got to see the latter which I feel like they would be really close. His interactions with Lillian was cute but funny! I also loved Lillian as her own character too as she seemed like a cool friend to have and not to mention the fact that she's got a great sense of humor and is also clever in her own way. 

The way he also seems to want to achieve getting really good grades for the Charms Owls Essays for Professor Flitwick because of the book he was lent-- I definitely relate to that feeling since I'm like that in life too so I guess that's one way I could find myself relating to his character which I liked. xD  Small tidbit but I don't know why but that just stood out to me. Personally, I love that Adrian was studious as well as pretty friendly and ambitious too since it's fun to see how his mind worked outside of Quidditch as well. I hope that part makes sense. I really loved how you characterized him seeing as he was very Slytherin-like but also he's very friendly.  I think that's the fun part of writing a very minor character? You don't know much about them so you can add details about them.  I feel that you did a really wonderful job because he felt realistic and charming which I think is a good combination hahaa. But seriously, I liked the way you wrote Adrian. 

 

I have to mention that I didn't expect that twist near the end in all honesty! I remember when I read to the end that I was like "Wait what!?" when I read it even though I can understand that it probably meant the letter. I had an inkling whom the letter was originally intended for and it was for Tennant but I was so convinced like Adrian Pucey that it was him at first so I felt like I was really waiting for something to happen between the two because of that. Your writing was so convincing that I almost forgot about the other Adrian hahaha. I think I only realized when I had to ask myself, "She knew! How?" and then I just had to sit there and think for a few minutes trying to recall what I just read hahaha. Honestly the twist was a really fun and clever to read.  I also have to mention that I did see that it was the first place winner of the Wrong Owl Challenge and I can understand how! It's very subtle in the way you wrote it as well! :) 

 

 

I really enjoyed how clever and cute this story was in general and it's great that you woven tons of life into Adrian Pucey as well as Lillian, Adrian Tennant, and Lucas! I will mention that a huge part of me is just itching to know if Tennant and Lillian got together and what would happen if Adrian went with the latter to Hogsmeade as friends and his friend saw though not gonna lie, apart from that, I felt this was definitely an enjoyable read! Keep up the awesome job! :) 

 

-Anni

 

Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 22 Sep 2019 08:01 PM · For: Letter, Match, Set

Madi,

I love it! I love the twist at the end. I love how the Slytherin was out slytherined. So, now I'm just wondering. Did she accidently send the letter to Pucey, realized it when she watched it get delivered, and purposely met him to see if she could get her letter back or did she always plan to send it to him, but purposely misguded him in the letter to see his reaction? Either way, she's a great character. Adrian Pucey thinks he a match for her. Well, only time will tell on that one, but I think he might have more than a challenge than his overconfident Slytherin opinion thinks.

 

Although I did like the ending, I really liked Adrian's "journey" through this story. Many of his reactions and reasonings are so typical of the unsure adolescent. Fixiating on the letter, having the situation spirale out of control is so typical teenager drama disaster when all he had to do was hand it over to Tennent during breakfast and said, "Good luck with her mate." Still what would be the fun in that.

 

As I read about his rewriting his entire paper to add some additional information from Flitwick's book, I could only shake my poor head at the guy. Wizards needs to learn about muggle computers-Google docs (and the Internet) would save them so much time. Then again when you can clean your entire house with the wave of a wand, I guess you need to spend your time doing something. 

Cute story, Madi. Definitely deserved the first place in the wrong owl challenge. 

Name: starbuck (Signed) · Date: 13 Apr 2019 07:07 PM · For: Letter, Match, Set

hey madi! i'm here with your challenge review ^_^

 

i've never read a story featuring adrian pucey but, as a proud slytherin ( :P ) i think it's awesome that you decided to write from his perspective and that you made him into a very nice slytherin. he really shows off his slytherin traits but he's obviously also very studious which works well with his ambition.

 

i also liked the way the letter meant for the other adrian (how you mentioned him at the start was nice because it wasn't too in your face but when our adrian got the letter it made me smile as i remembered the other adrian!) was received by adrian pucey - he's totally unsure of what to do and it's obviously making him feel guilty but ultimately, when he meets lillian there's no way he would actually do anything about that letter. it might not be the nicest thing in the world but still - the two of them seem to fit very well together and i'm glad she figured it out but decided to hang out/go out with him instead :D

 

kris

Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 03 Apr 2019 08:18 PM · For: Letter, Match, Set

  Hi, Madi! It's terrific twists and turns. You connected the story challenge theme with the  mind games between two people awesomely. I was very impressed. You came up with the stunning idea with playing with the same first name, Adrian. I vaguely remember I used the one, who was a Slytherin Quidditch player in my first HP fanfiction. I like friendship between Adrian and the first captain of the team you wrote. And you caught the characteristics of the second captain Flint and Draco very well and put them into the words nicely.  I guess you seemed to do well research over two Adrians from Slytherin House before writing this story. So many kudos!

 Not only that the plot is nice, but your descriptions around the background of each character is awesome. I admire you for your rich imagination.

   Moreover, you focused on the protagonist's angst worrying about how he should get the letter back to Lilian or pass it to his team mate.  In that way, the story got more interesting for the readers to read. The last scene is the best Ravenclaw-ish episode I've ever encountered. :)

 

K