Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 11 Jul 2020 01:07 PM · For: Percy

This was so sweet! I love the framing! How you started each chapter with “The first time” and ended with “held your tongue.” I found myself  jumping to each section wanting to know what the first time would be to show the next level of the relationship.

The best was the first time I cried.. For a moment, I thought she broke up with him and then I finished the sentence about walking down the aisle and I thought about how it made the story that much sweeter. The vows were adorable, how he wasn’t even listening to the minister, his nervousness and the ending when he didn’t hold his tongue but said the words that made him hers--so romantic.

 

Lovely story, definitely a feel good one!

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 08 May 2020 07:43 PM · For: Percy

 

Hey Lo,

 

This was so beautiful! I know it's quite an old story but I thought it was just so lovely. I thought you really nailed Percy as a character. His nervousness and awkwardness was captured so perfectly and it was framed as really endearing quality honestly. I was rooting for Percy to be brave at take that next step at the end of section. I thought you chosen your little memories so perfectly, some of those small but important moments. I love in the first section how you  focus on Percy's senses in your descriptions of Audrey. They created such fantastic imagery of Audrey. It felt really romantic already. 

 

I love how you detail their first meeting. I can totally imagine Percy being kinda stiff with her. I think he probably struggles a little with new piece. It seemed like they weren't going to getting anywhere quickly :P  I love how we don't really find out too much about Audrey but the moments of world building we see are really good. I like that's she is a reporter and career driven too. I do this story is written through such a romantic lense. Percy is just so in love with her from the beginning. It's so sweet!

 

Aww, I can't even decide which is the most romantic part of this story is because it's all adorable. I thought that first date scene was so creative. I personally be terrified to go a first date that involved skating because I'm just so awful at it that my date would embarrassed for me. I think I would be the one ending up in St Mungos. Audrey is obviously a lot better at skating than I. I can saying 'love' but I can't help it! It's just like a fluffy hug this story! You write such good fluff. You've just captured all the little things that make up a relationship. The last couple of lines is such beautiful sentiment! This deserves a keyboard smash because I've run out of words to just describe the cuteness of this whole piece. I love it! 

 

Abbi xx

 

(Written for RvG - May) 

 

Name: RonsGirlFriday (Signed) · Date: 04 May 2020 11:28 PM · For: Percy

Argggh, never again in my life will I read something as lovely as this, and it is for this reason that I must try to recreate my previous review now that you've re-posted it, for it is a crime for this fic to have no love.

 

I will always be here for a Percy who is a hopeless romantic for the right woman, and an Audrey who breaks through his walls (or for whom he lets them down willingly, even better). When I have seen Percy written by others in the past, I have often seen him meeting Audrey soon after the loss of Fred, and her helping him through it, but I don't know that I've ever seen a Percy/Audrey where they're both struck with the same losses, so this was a nice take!

 

Pining, lovestruck Percy is lovely. I am convinced within myself that he doesn't lack interesting thoughts -- he simply has a more active filter than others, so this thing about him exercising restraint until the proper time for everything is very in character for him.

 

I'm a sucker for repetition, and the repetition here of th first time for each thing and "You held your tongue and" is just so perfect, particularly when contrasted with the last section and "You let the words come." Urgggh the wedding scene is perfect, him amazed and tongue-tied and in love and needing her.

 

Also, props to you for a very good use of second person. I think second person has its place now and again, and this was a fantastic execution of it.

 

I weep with the beauty of this. Thank you for writing it. I stan a human, loving Percy and will never ever stop talking about it.

 

<3

Melanie