Name: WriteYourHeartOut (Signed) · Date: 17 Feb 2024 09:58 PM · For: I want your midnights

This whole chapter is a giant SQUEE! I just love your writing here. There's something about the way you end your sentences, like the follow-through they have, the way they wrap up. I don't know how to really articulate it, but I feel it in these two lines in particular:

 

"He'd have been a liar if he said he'd never thought about this. He'd have been a lying fucking liar who lied."

"She was on his lap, fingers in his hair, gasping against his mouth and making sounds that were going to ruin his entire life."

 

Hopefully you get what I mean from the examples, I don't know how to phrase it, I just know I love it. Anyway, I thought they were about to transport back as soon as Ron kissed her hand, actually! And then again when he gave her a real kiss! That mistletoe turned up, and I'm surprised Hermione didn't make the connection to their final day, and think "hey, isn't that the last thing we did together before we were put into this crazy fever dream?" I wonder if it will happen while they sleep, in the next chapter if they wake up alone and back at Hogwarts because kissed? Either way, this chapter was wonderful, I love your Ron and Hermione and the easy tension you built with their sparring dialogue and tiptoeing and eventual stubborn honesty. It's just wonderful.

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 10 Feb 2024 08:13 AM · For: I want your midnights

Hi, Melanie.  It looks as if things are beginning to turn around for our lovers, although they're still stuck in the twenty-first century.  

 

Mistletoe has suddenly sprouted over their heads on New Year's Eve at midnight.  Aha!  Didn't I say something in my review of Chapter 2 about tricky mistletoe?

 

When they talk about "What if this is it?" Hermione simply can't go with the flow.  She can't say to herself, "Fate threw us together and we really lucked out."  She's the girl that has to plan everything ahead of time and make logical decisions before taking any action.  The sort of person who wouldn't go on a blind date for fear she might actually like the guy before she had done a full background check on him.  I was not expecting any happy issue out of this conversation, but suddenly they both confess that they were both jealous of each other's boy/girl friends at Hogwarts, and they both decide that they did love each other back then, so now they're happy again.  Pretty fluffy.  :)  :)  <3  <3  

 

A cute story, but I'm still waiting to see how they get back to their own time.  More mistletoe?

 

Vicki

Name: prideofprewett (Signed) · Date: 09 Feb 2024 03:03 PM · For: I want your midnights

Mel! Here for some more reviews! 

 

I think Hermione's fears are valid. And Ron's inability to properly communicate (like most dudes with the mentality of a sixteen year old boy) definitely showcase the struggles with this arrangement and it being valid. And I think the way that Ron goes about reassuring her by way of: "why is it so ridiculous that I want to choose you?" And her admitting, "I hate seeing you with her." They come to a better place of understanding. That allows things to develop deeper for them not only in the physical aspect, but on an emotional level.  

 

The "I've never had sex before," // "Oh but I know two names that prove you have," banter had me laughing hard. It IS such a Ron thing to say. 

 

Also, I don't know if you intended it, but the bit at the beginning regarding Rose's Astronomy obsession and the title of this chapter and then the concept of a new year and the planet having completed a full rotation around the sun...I just loved that tie in, whether intentional or not. :)

 

~ Courtney

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 07 Feb 2024 12:41 PM · For: I want your midnights

hi,

 

wow! this chapter was a roller coaster of emotions! amazing! so brilliant for that admitting of feelings. you kept that very character, really nicely done. i think hermione had such valid fears like ron expects everyone's brains to be in sync or something honestly so hermione doesn't get where he's coming from. ron's feelings in this chapter has never been out of the blue. he's felt things already. i thought it was really emotionally and lovely done.

 

I love the reminder that they are teenagers still and haven't really lost that nervous energy despite finding themselves with kids as adults. they've matured in this story as young adults, figuring out what they wanted. the balance was brilliant! i've really enjoyed this story so far :) 

 

Abbi xx

 

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Name: Goatspeed (Signed) · Date: 03 Jan 2024 02:37 AM · For: I want your midnights

No wonder Ron's a lunatic!  Another splendid chapter, of course - Hermione is such a fifties kind of girlfriend, though, until the eighties kick in, of course.  And that damn castle is still messing with them, too!  Mistletoe over the couch?  Mwah-hah-hah.

Mel, when you get rolling I just read along with a big old shit-eating grin on my face.  This is definitely one of those times.  Whoever got this for Christmas was mighty lucky, and the rest of us should be thanking them for asking and you for giving it.  Great fun!

George

Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 31 Dec 2023 01:29 AM · For: I want your midnights

Aww, they’re finally getting comfortable, but it only lasts a second because MISTLETOE!!!!

Is it the castle coming back to haunt them???

Haha, the whole McGonagall dream… oh gosh! Yes, sometimes dreams don’t mean anything, but still…

I’m glad they had this honest conversation that has been brewing unspoken for days, because it makes the next part all the sweeter when Hermione finally understands the argument they’ve been having from chapter 1. Sometimes misplaced anger just messes with you and it’s impossible to articulate everything after that. But I’m glad they get there. 

SO MUCH ADORABLENESS!!!

Pix