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Hi again.
"Change is the only constant so live it up while you can"
I...am trying to get my head around that statement. It's still early-ish, lol. There's a time and a place for unnecessary guitar solos and that happens to be never (fact).
Really love the dynamic between Al and Vic. I know it's not going to go anywhere between them for obvious reasons, but I get the feeling that they are super close and like two best mates or possibly siblings.
Oooh, things are definitely hotting up between Vic and James. Alcohol is great at revealing inner feelings, amirite? And Vic isn't exactly hating James watching her or putting his hands on her. Then...potato vodka?? HA - where did that come from??
I guess Vic is living up this changing constant...or constant change...
I am SO SAD this is the latest chapter and I NEED an update because I have to know where this goddam hot fic is heading, hmmkay? SWOON
Meera <3 (galazy review)
Hi again!
Ireland Maude - what a name for a supermodel. Still it's a memorable one, I'll give it that. Love the blog-esque way this chapter is presented to begin with; you're such a natural at writing commentary!
Ah yes; the 1994 World Cup. Let's not go there, hey?!
Eating...people? :eyes:
OMG, does anything make golf appealing? Not even if all the players were goddam supermodels could I be persuaded to watch. And Reality TV makes me feel worse aboout myself when I see how low the human race has sunk in the last twenty years SMH
Oh. Vic was hoping for more than just a cheek kiss? It's hard when one person's expectations don't match the delivery from the other person, right? Especially if there's some kind of 'past' there.
Gluten Tag!! OMG I LOVE a beery pun and I am envious you beat me to that one, haha!
Loving the dynamics in this fic and seeing the world through Vic's eyes!
Meera <3 (galazy review)
Hello again!
Brews and burgers make the perfect addition to any shopping day? Brews yes. Especially of the alcoholic variety. Burgers, umm no. Sorry! The whole 'pretend to be a tourist thing in a city you know well' cracks me up!
Yeah, separating the whole 'little sister's ex-boyfriend' and 'quidditch star extraordinaire' must be a dilemma for Geno - does he go all overprotective older sibling or play it cool like he doesn't care because JAMES POTTER??
I'm with James on the balance of healthy stuff to cancel out the negatives in that burger. Won't the rest of them please think about their colon health??
Hmm. Does Will mind? My guess is that yes, he does. Really.
Can I just mention that I love you've managed to get your own username into this chapter? Kudos level sky-high: unlocked <3
This story is so much fun! I can't quite tell where it's heading yet but that's part of its charm, I think!
Meera <3 (galazy review)
Hello, it's me again.
Sorry, but Single Sickle Sticks - greasy meat on a stick in a bun - sound utterly revolting LOL. Probably like a shish kebab but I'm not that fond of those either.
THEY BOUGHT SIXTEEN STICKS?? Holy fk, what is wrong with some people?
Al, that's very rude to steal that sickle stick and boo at the opposition's goal. The mention of 'boyfriend' that Vic seemed to quickly cover up - errm, is she having some secret thing going on with someone? :eyes: She doesn't want her mother to find out - won't she approve, or will she take the piss; why won't she say?
OMG I'm not surprised she's keeping it low-key when her mother is rueing the absence of grandchildren and Vic has just said that this guy, whoever he is, is not her boyfriend. Who is he? Not James Potter?? Oh no, James is her ex?? Isn't that a bit awkward for her to be sitting with his family or no? Maybe she didn't like the boyfriend but liked his family and decided to keep them instead? It happens :shrug:
Thanks for the awesome read!
Meera <3 (galazy review)
Hi, here for a galazy review!
'Ganged Fermanium' - brilliant bit of spoonerisming there, especially as 'Ferm' could be a shortened form of 'ferment' for the beer brewing process! I love the key statement at the beginning of this chapter about appreciating the finer things in life (including your family, even if they're giving you shit), and the bit about gluten-free beer! Yay for someone in the wizarding world who cares about coeliac disease sufferers at last!
Ahh, Victoriya is Viktor Krum's daughter? COOL! And she's writing a blog too! "Why go online when you have paper" but why waste paper when you can post online (and save wear and tear on an owl in the process)?
Viktor, like many parents, is probably a bit stuck in his ways, by the sounds of things. The family dynamic is super funny and fresh to read, though. Avocado toast? I wonder how that's going to go down with the diehards of The Leaky Cauldron; will they be pining after their pumpkin pasties? I'm gonna read on and find out!
Meera <3
Hi Sarah! Sorry it’s been so long since I read this, but I’m here now and enjoyed chapter two just as much as I did chapter one! I love the friendship between Victoriya and Al, and how much good-natured fun and camaraderie there is between the Krums and the Potters -- though did I catch that Victoriya at some point dated James (I’m assuming it’s James) so that’s a little awkward? Or are we going to get into that a little bit later? :P I really like your idea of single sickle sticks; that seems like a realistic thing the stadium would do to draw in the younger crowd for game days, ticket prices notwithstanding. Victoriya has such a great voice when it’s her blog section of the chapter, and her bite is equally funny, if more present, in the actual scenes playing out. Loved it! :)
~Madi
Fairy foxy review event
Hiya, I’m back for the HC finale!
I love how Vic’s blog is slowly but surely turning from a food blog into a sort of... more general lifestyle and advice blog? Like, the last two blog shells have felt much more personal than earlier ones, and at the same time, we also learn a lot more about Vic’s life once we get to the actual story, and I love the parallels in that!
I’m not sure which story you wrote first, this chapter or the prequel when both James and Vic are still at Hogwarts, but either way I loved the hat-stealing parallel! That’s such a fun connection, and because this one is set later (and because I read the other one first) and it feels very sweet and nostalgic here!
I absolutely love James’ and Vic’s dynamic! They’ve got such natural chemistry, and the way they’re drawn to each other, even across a crowded room really makes me wonder why they broke up in the first place!
I’m very intrigued by this Wright guy, did he try to flaunt James’ and Vic’s relationship for publicity? That would certainly put a lot of pressure on the two of them!
Gaah! I really need to know more about what’s happened with James and Vic! And what’s going to happen, hopefully!
Love, Julia
Hello, I’m back again for the HC finale!
Oh, if Ryan is the not-a-boyfriend Al mentioned at the quidditch game, it makes extra sense that Vic would want to keep quiet about him, given the whole Irish thing! Also, wasn’t Lynch the seeker’s name in the 1994 world cup – so I’m assuming Ryan is his son, or some relation in any case! You’d have assumed that Viktor would have the least amount of beef with that seeker (and any of his progeny) though, given that Viktor was the one who made the decision to go for the catch, and that he beat him in the chase for the snitch, so really, Lynch had preciously little to do with Irish victory! Then again, I guess principles are principles – being Irish is probably a big enough offense in Viktor’s book, and being in any way connected to the winning team of ’94 must just add to that, even if the connection is to the losing seeker!
I do like Ryan, though, he seems very sweet! It’s adorable of him to come to the party, even if he can’t stay long! But Vic doesn’t seem to ~vibe ~ with him in the same way that she does with James. I felt like conversation (what little we got to see of it, anyway) between Vic and Ryan was a bit awkward, whereas she and James have this natural chemistry!
I’m really excited to see where this goes! I want to see more of Ryan, to give him a bit of a fighting chance, but also! James!
Love, Julia
I absolutely adored this chapter! I’m a sucker for good sibling dynamics, and I absolutely love the one between Vic and Geno (and Will, by extension)! As a younger sister, I can confirm that it is indeed our duty and highest pleasure to annoy our older brothers in just the right ways! I loved that bit about extracting just the right combination of grimace from Geno :P
Oh wow, that is such an absolutely horrific headline, but I’m glad they can see the fun in it :D
Haha, I absolutely loved the little self-insert as a type of beer :D And the older wizard’s outrage over them ruining the beer industry by drinking it :P
I loved getting to see a little more about Vic’s (former) relationship with James! I wonder what happened between them! I can’t imagine that they parted ways anything but amicably by the way she brings him up casually in conversation! If anything, Geno seems a lot more bothered by it than her, but maybe that’s just him being annoyed that his little sister’s got an ex-boyfriend at all? I’m very curious to find out more, though!
Love, Julia
This was such a fun chapter!
I love how the Krums and the Potters still watch the games together, even if their sons are playing for different teams! And Al and Vic’s tradition of finding the greasiest, unhealthiest, cheapest, most delicious food they can find is goals! I also love how Vic complains about not being able to afford both tickets and food at the game when she could definitely get tickets for free, with her brother playing! But I guess she has to be #relatable :P
Speaking of relatable, I totally get her frustration over her family’s interest in her dating life/lack thereof – anything to distract the conversation from that particular line of questioning, thank you! Although, I have to admit that I am curious! What’s this Al’s saying about a potential boyfriend? :P
Love, Julia
Okay Sarah, I’m very late with this review but shh it’s fine we’ll ignore how long it’s been languishing in my thread!!
I knew this was going to contain OCs, but I didn’t realize (for some reason) it was going to be the children of Viktor Krum, which is like, super rad!! Also, yes SO MILLENNIAL of Victoriya to be writing a food blog on the internet *joy emoji* Her blog writing style is really nice and simple to read, but still sounds professional, so great job to you for that! I also really like the family dynamic you’ve created already in this opening chapter. It’s clear Viktor and his wife love their children a lot, and let them do what the enjoy, even if they don’t necessarily understand how it’s a job in the case of Victoriya. Little sister Malina seems very spunky which I am so here for, and I hope brother Geno shows up later, just for that good natured sibling rivalry Victoriya mentioned in her blog. Very well done opening chapter, Sarah! :)
~Madi
Broom Racing
Hello!! I'm here ages after I said I would come and read but i did and now I'm finally sitting down to review as well!!
Honestly I really enjoy Vic as an OC, I love how you've crafted her family and her relationships with them - I think that anyone who treats Krum as kind of a dumb athlete is doing him a real disservice, and a disservice to the comraderie he and Harry had, and I love how you've included that here as well as shown how their families have become more interwoven as they've grown up as well because it feels very real and natural.
I am very eager to learn more about James and Vic's (ex?? maybe not for very long?) relationship and what they are to each other now and what the next chapter will bring, so I look forward to it! <3
Julie
hey sarah, here for rvg! <3
godddd i love victoriya so much, the voice you've given her it just so absolutely delightful. the sarcasm and snark is so over the top and honestly is just kind of peak millennial (tm), and as a millennial that irreverence is something that i am Here for
DATING IS NOT HOW YOU FIND OUT IF YOU LIKE SOMEONE OMG, you date somebody after you've determined that you like them enough to date them, anything before that is not a proper date, it's a "let's get to know each other and see if we want to throttle each other five minutes in"
<3 amazing job!
THIS MOMENT TO SAY THAT I LOVE THE ABOUT THE BLOGGER
goddamnit i should write more for it to count for rvg (team red) but all i have are these shit comments, i need the sobby face here
okay no for serious, this 10/10 captures exactly what being a millennial Means To Me, which fits the challenge but also makes me so happy. the snark and just like... open acknowledgment of absurdity + masking insecurity beneath snarky jokes is just 10/10 perfection (both in the about the blogger and in the blog/commentary on her father)
also, as someone with some fucking gluten issue, gluten-sensitive and "gluten-sensitive" cracked me the fuck up because it's so fucking true
in closing, thank you for not trying to write a fucking accent, they're so goddamn unreadable
i apologize for this mess of a review
Yes I’m back, back again. For the May RvG! (and because this is a great story, but w/e on to the chapter!)
Dang, alright starting off with a bang! I like the inclusion of the game day ritual, although I find it funny that Albus and James don’t believe in it. Especially James, although that definitely tracks with his health conscious thing - he probably laughs at Geno and says something like “talent beats superstition” or something equally as annoying.
And there’s James, ready to make me - I mean Vic - fall in love with him. Although it seems that they never really let their feelings go. I know that I intentionally avoid exes in public and definitely don’t ask them to do shots unless I still have the feelings, so… But then again, Vic isn’t me. Although that vodka is a vegetable comment is definitely very familiar - and a great touch.
I don’t like Wright. I wonder why she doesn’t feel supported. You left it a little unclear (probably for good reason), but I’m expecting it to be because either she’s the perfect WAG or she shouldn’t be around, according to them. Which makes me wonder if that’s a partner of a player thing or a female thing as in sports in real life.
Either way, I wonder why they’re so okay with going home together so immediately. I mean mostly about Vic since she has that thing with Lynch. Did they end it? Did they not? Is this a regular occurrence for Vic and James? I have so many questions and because there’s no next chapter I’m at a loss.
I mean I’m totally here for them, but I don’t want it to be a hook-up thing wherein Vic gets hurt. I already love her, don’t make me hate James for this because I am also in love with him (but not nearly to the same extent).
Anyways, please write and post the next chapter soon because I’m dying to continue this. And, as always, thank you so much for writing this because this has been a great read so far!
Lo <3
I didn’t go very far, I’m back again for more RvG May Madness!
I loved that you inserted a quick little nod to trying to set her brother up. Honestly, your family dynamics are so good through this all. I keep saying it and I won’t stop saying it. From the family in general to the sibling dynamic to Vic making a joke about her dad disowning her. I love it all.
I gotta assume Ryan Lynch is number one, in which case - is he the love interest? Maybe it’s the romantic in me but I keep seeing potential romantic suitors. Oop, I guess that would be a yes. And also, let me now gush over your cousin dynamic.
Oh dang, they are not gonna last. He may be easy on the eyes but my money is still on older brother’s best friend. I wonder if his inability to hang out that often was the start of what is obviously the end of their situationship. Also quick note: it should be “inexcusable”.
Oh dang. But then there’s the ex-bf. And what about his best friend? I don’t know how you did it but I want to read this story like seven different times, each with a different love interest. I think it’s so interesting how I still can’t pinpoint who I think is the best, so I need that to happen soon, alright? I mean, obviously she still has some feelings for James (and the tags have a James/OC), but I gotta wonder if no one else will come into play.
Oh dang, that ending decided it. I am also in love with James Potter, and even though Ryan Lynch topped the Ireland list, I think Vic would be hard pressed not to put her ex-boyfriend at the top of an all time crush list. I am sure they still have feelings for each other.
I still love the articles and the last paragraph of this was hilarious. I have one more chapter left before I’m caught up, so hopefully you update this ASAP because I need it completed yesterday.
Also quick thing I just noticed - the Article headline at the start should be “Citizenship”.
Alright, thanks so much for writing this, I love reading it, and I’ll be right back with the next chapter!
Lo <3
Hello hello! Here for the May ‘20 RvG!
Alright, so immediately my question from last chapter was answered - the ex is James. And interesting how Geno doesn’t seem to like him. I need the backstory - WHAT IS IT? It seems there’s a rivalry between the two even if they are teammates (possibly exacerbated by that?), and I like how Vic teases him with it! I think I mentioned liking the family dynamic in my last review, but honestly this sibling dynamic is 10/10!
Will is interesting. I’m wondering if he’s going to be a love interest. Older brother’s best friend whom she considers an older brother? That is definitely a popular love interest’s position in a story. AND he doesn’t like any of the boys she dates? I’m feeling a strong love interest vibe.
One thing I noticed: “but she can’t deny she’s not touched…” is basically saying she has to admit she’s not touched. I’m assuming it was supposed to be “she can’t say she’s not touched” or “she can’t deny that she’s touched.” Or maybe I’m completely off the mark and she does dislike their support, who knows.
Oh. I guess he won’t be a love interest? Stop playing games with my heart, I want them together for no reason now! Although I’m here for them possibly flirting to annoy Geno and then falling in love. Too here for it.
Your pen name is in this and it was such a sneaky little cameo, I loved it ;)
I still absolutely love the little inserts of her articles at the start and end of your chapters. I still think it’s super unique and they’re always a great little read before getting into the ‘real’ story. Gotta say it every time, but thank you for writing this because I am continuing to love reading it!
Lo <3
Hello! I am back, once again for RvG POGs special!
Alright, I fall more in love with Victoriya with every chapter. A girl who loves Quidditch and cheap food? Marry me!
But to the point, I love that her blog allows her to talk about a variety of food, because this article was hilarious! I also really enjoyed how she/you added in the fact that ticket prices are going up. I think that was a great detail, and really highlighted how amazing it is that these meat sticks (I’m picturing they’re like deep fried chicken on a stick in a bun?) are so cheap.
Also I’m loving this introduction of Albus - is he one of her flatmates? They seem very comfortable with each other, a great best friend dynamic (although with the comment about her ex-boyfriend’s family I’m wondering if they’re simply best friends or also exes?). I love that they bought so many Sickle Sticks, especially because it’s obvious that dinner has been pushed back many many hours in the past. Very great detail and definitely relatable.
I love how Viktor and Harry seem to be so close, and how they hole themselves up in a corner so they can watch the game uninterrupted. As someone who hates when my favourite sports are interrupted by dumb commentary, I thought that was a great touch.
The boyfriend talk was great! One thing I did notice throughout it, however, was that dialogue from one person was mixed with actions from another, so I had to reread some of the dialogue to actually realize who was talking. The time it really messed with me was “Nice try with the cover up” from Vic’s dad, mostly because the dialogue ended with a comma and not a period so it felt like the two things were from the same person.
Okay, who is her ex? Is it James? Is it Albus? If it’s James that could be very interesting, if it’s Albus, I wonder how they maintained such a close friendship! But who is this new boyfriend? Agh, you’ve got my poor little heart so confused!
Again, I loved the little articles, they really let you learn more about Vic without having the story feel too cluttered with more info about her that really doesn’t need to be said in the actual story. And her/your version of her writing is super fun and I could totally see myself constantly checking this blog and favouriting it.
I absolutely love this story, so thank you for writing it because I love reading it!
Lo <3
Hello hello! I’m here for the RvG POGs special!
This was a great opening chapter and I think opening the opening chapter with Vic’s column was a really great way to show her personality right out the gate, as well as give me, the reader, a few more details about her that would’ve been weird to just put into the story. It was very subtle, but really cool, to read through it!
I also really loved that I didn’t realize that Vic was Viktor Krum until that information was relevant to the story. And the fact that his daughters don’t really seem to care about his career is definitely something I love to see while reading. Especially since their brother also seems to be a Quidditch legend. It was a really great way to show this family’s dynamic and I think you nailed it.
Also the whole “younger generation is killing X, Y, and Z” was hilarious to include. Journalism, print media, and the “only time will tell” line cracked me up. Hopefully her blog manages to get some heavy ratings and her family starts accepting it as true journalism - because it is! But that whole family scene was super cute and as a member of a family, felt very true to life.
I also really loved the little “About the Blogger” at the end - again, it added some information about Vic in a way that was very subtle and felt very natural. I’m now very interested to meet her flatmates, to learn her favourite type of coffee, and maybe we’ll meet her brother? That seems like a fun duo to read about!
Anyways, this was super fun and I’m excited to read more!
Lo <3
Hiya, Sarah! Here for RvG POGs edition and--believe it or not--your requested review from... months ago! lol. Please pardon the extreme lateness.
What a great chapter! I really feel like we've gotten into the swing of the story now with the character highlights and their relationships (or lack thereof) in fuller detail. What a web you've created! I'm curious to see what else will develop over the mere act of congregating together over food and drink.
I really enjoyed reading Vic and Geno's sibling banter, of seeing the dynamics of their relationship. I like how he's the overprotective older brother and she's the long suffering younger sister, lol. Both of them are capable of taking care of themselves, but I like their insistence of caring for each other while still showing a little resistance. Also, Will Jones is a hysterical dynamic to this group as well, bringing down some of the building sibling tension and being there to gang up on either Vic or Geno (but mostly Geno, lol). The three of them are clearly such good friends, and it was so enjoyable to read them bicker and tease and laugh.
I hope we can see more of James Potter soon! Being in Geno's position must be a little awkward: teammate of JSP but also brother of JSP's ex. He plays the role of awkward discomfort well, and I hope you tease him a little more because he's fun to read that way, lol. Oh dear, I hope I'm not being too mean to Geno, but really, he's set himself up with the way he reacts to things. ;)
Also: do you have a beer list of the wizarding world made up? I love the reference to your name (Belgian Quaffle) lol, but also I can just taste the wateriness of Squabs Lite, ahahaha. Nice nod to the overpriced Squabs Lite being millenials' fault, lol, but also, internally crying in outrage at such a comment. :P
But my favorite thing about this chapter is how you have the beginning and endings of Vic's blog entries bookending the chapter. You set up the atmosphere and the scenario (in this case, burger and beers in a brewery) and paint it as something very ideal. While I think this lunch with Geno and Will are ideal, being mates with Vic and all, there's a lot of hidden complexities of Vic's life on display here that I am certain don't make her food blog. It's a great contrast, and it goes to show that the writer of anything: food blog, newspaper article, fan fic, has a life that is far more complex than the context of their writing. Well done!
Hi Sarah! Here for RvG and to catch up with this story :)
I've really missed Vic! I still love the style of this story, with the way that you introduce and end each chapter with Vic's blog. It's a really effective way of pulling us back into the story, and they're so fun and chatty to read that they capture her personality really well. I also love the way that they give us a hint of the tone of each chapter and something that's going to happen in it, but they don't tell us the full story. It's almost like we're getting a secret inside look at this blogger's life with the main chapter.
You captured the party atmosphere so brilliantly here! I can definitely understand that sense of enthusiasm and elation surrounding sports and particularly when it comes to the national game. I loved the personality that Vic's superstitions gave her, though deciding that you have to wear certain things or perform certain routines for a particular result to happen is a very dangerous road to begin down. I kind of don't blame Al and Scorpius for their reaction to her trying to desperately catch that hat.
The chemistry between James and Vic is definitely still there! I'm so curious to know more about what happened between them and why they broke up, since they definitely seem to still be getting together on at least semi-regular occasions, and I'm more than slightly shipping them. I wonder if they'll be able to keep up like this, just casually getting together, or if we'll see them addressing whatever happened...
Siân :)
alright! i'm here with review 5/5 :D
it's crazy to me how every chapter of this so far is basically just victoriya bantering with various people over various subjects, yet out of that you've managed to portray distinct relationships between her and all the other characters? like (unsurprisingly) the way that she talks to her dad isn't the same as the way she talks to her brother, and in the same vein, the way she talks to al isn't the same as the way she talks to will or geno. i think it's really impressive, and as i said in my last review, it's a sign in my eyes that you have a very clear idea in your head of who victoriya is.
i think this might have been my favourite of the three chapters i read so far? and that's mostly because i think this dynamic was my favourite one so far. the relationship between victoriya, geno and will really shone through so clearly, literally within the first couple of paragraphs. I loved the part right at the beginning, after the blog entry intro, where victoriya is quite delighted by geno's judgemental face, rather than put out by it or irritated. as an older sibling, i definitely do have the sense that younger siblings enjoy riling their older siblings up! i think you captured that in a very sweet way though.
the bit with victoriya and will riling geno up even further by acting a bit lovey-dovey with each other was hilarious, as was the brief mention of the "fake news" headline about will, geno and victoriya having a threesome (yikes!!). i don't have anything particularly intelligent to say about it or anything, i just thought it was really funny and it cracked me up.
this whole chapter flowed really well, it was a super easy and fun read. and i liked the closing bit of the blog entry, it was touching to see a genuine comment from victoriya about being glad for the chance to catch up with her brother.
(i don't know anything about beer, so no comment on the craft vs non-craft exchange at the end of the chapter, but i will say - lol, i see you making your penname a beer. very apropos.)
good job, sarah! i'm glad we had this chance to swap.
-kayla
hello sarah! i'm here for the gryffie march review swap - better late than never???
i was pretty sure i remembered reading this chapter already, and i was surprised i hadn't reviewed it, but then i got to the end note and it all made sense hahaha.
this whole self-isolation situation has me craving so much junk food, so i must say, i was very into the idea of these single sickle sticks. i can totally understand victoriya's enthusiasm for them. i, too, would purchase approximately 8 of them right now if given the opportunity.
i loved the setting for this chapter, because it really felt like there were so many prime opporunities for banter, all of which you took great advantage of. this group of family/friends sitting together but being mixed in which team they're supporting leaves lots of room for funny jibes, such as "grey's not your colour - washes you out" (hahaha, get him victoriya). what i really enjoy about this story is that each chapter (so far) is like 99.9% bickering, but there's no real heat behind any of it and you can tell that the underlying sentiment is affection, so that just makes it really fun and amusing rather than stressful :P
the talking vs. dating debate cracked me up. i feel like the concept of dating and being together is one that evolves so constantly that it really does vary from generation to generation (and obviously from culture to culture as well). i feel like even the concept of "dating" that viktor puts forward here would've been foreign to people who came a generation or two before him.
this chapter was a lot of fun, i feel like you have such a clear vision of who victoriya is and that allows you to create these really strong interactions between her and your other characters. great job!
-kayla
Hey Sarah! here with your review from the forums. before I begin, please excuse any typos, I can only use one hand now due to an injury haha.
Omg I love that this was for the millennials ruin everything challenge. I remember seeing that a while back and thinking I needed to read all the entries.
Speaking of millennials, I like that the blog entry that opens the chapter totally reads like the beginning of a recipe on a cooking blog, which feels like a very millennial thing. You know, the ones where people talk abouit how much they love fall and the crispness of the leaves and that one time they went to Vermont in the fall, and then here’s a pumpkin scone recipe with maple glaze. Ive got everything from this intro except the scone recipe. :P So, the opening feels appropriately millennial, haha.
Though it does have me wondering – this is a blog, so do wizards now use the internet? Have they adjusted to fit muggle technology like computers and phones into their lives or do they have something else that accesses it? Do they use the same internet or is there a Wizard Web? Like, their internet addresses all start with ww. Instead of www. Aaaand, this is off topic, sorry :P back to the story.
I like the name Ganged Feranium for a brewery. Im surprised it replaced the leaky cauldron though! I kinda just imagined that lasting forever but of course places come and go. Loooool and then her dad complains that millennia,s ruined the leaky cauldron OF COURSE. Sidenote I don’t often see stories about viktor krum in the next gen era so im excited about this one. His characterization is really enjoyable in how traditional you’ve written him and how annoyed he is about trendy craft beers or the demise of newspapers.
And of course, one does not simply write a story about millennials ruining everything without mentioning avocado toast. The emblem of a generation. To be fair though, it is really freaking delicious and who even needs to buy a house anyway.
The about the blogger at the end has answered some of my questions – wizards have phones. But im still curious if they have different phones or if they’re part of the muggle system. 500 galleons says Viktor does not have one because it ruins the old method of communicating via patronus. But a patronus ccommunication is like the equivalent of a voicemail and nobody has time to listen to those. I kind of wonder if anyone will invent a spell that’s the equivalent of sending a text.
The chapter is well polished and flows nicely for the most part. The only sentence that threw me off for a bit was this one: “You ruined The Leaky Cauldron,” Victoriya rolls her eyes at her dad’s statement
It’s not clear until later in the sentence that Victoriya’s dad is the speaker, since Victoriya is mentioned first and it initially seems like she is the speaker. To separate her reaction from his sentence, you could probably re-word it like this for clarity:
“You ruined the Leaky Cauldron.”
Victoriya rolls her eyes at her dad’s statement.
Anyway, I really like what Ive read so far! This story has me wondering all sorts of things about the future of technology in the wizarding world which is quite honestly a fascinating topic, and I really like the famiy dynamic you’ve created for the Krums and I am interested to know more about them! I also like the part-blog, part-narrative style, it’s a great way to show Victoriya’s inner voice but still tell the story in third person. I hope to read more soon – great work so far!
Howdy!
As with many stories this go 'round I feel pretty certain I've R&R-ed here before, but since the archive says no, I'm going with that.
I thought this story and concept were hilarious. It's so original - a foodie blogger in the wizarding world, the internet in the wizarding world at all, and generational clashes rather than blood-related clashes. The blog obviously ties so well with the old v. new family dynamic that actually takes place face-to-face.
One of the things that I also find interesting in the story is that we're dealing with Viktor Krum's family. We never get to see that in fic and the way you write the sibling dynamic between Quidditch-er v. non-Quidditchers is, while short, amusing - especially as Viktor sort of admits it. Malina is perhaps the biggest riot of the story so far. For me, she was a total scene-thief because she just rags on everything. Her parents for being old sticks in the money. Her sister for being a food blogger. Her brother for playing Quidditch. While she doesn't have a job yet, I think she could be hired by someone as a professional troller.
I also like the blog components themselves - including and perhaps especially the About Me - which is all so on-point with modern times.
Thanks for sharing!
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